The 8pm show for a smaller than usual audience
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VVOPdBv81aE
4m05s I got way too distracted without making it funny
4m51s Smile a little more on the immigrant line
7m28s DVD line works better when I’m sad
Overall: Weak set, especially the second half. I should’ve used a few a more save lines or gone into crowd work earlier.
Late night music and comedy
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oRUIdUtETgI
1m27s Change the delivery on the friends line
3m54s Stay pointing at/addressing one specific person for the propose line
8m40s Tighten the wording, or at least make it flow better
9m19s Don’t use bottle twice in the sentence, say liter the first time
10m24s Make the motion more obvious that I’m referring to my face
11m08s Try “they’re all smiling and happy, cause they just got my new DVD”
Overall: Great set of mostly new material, especially considering it was 2am.
MCing a show for 10-12 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FhU9LllstwY
0m20s Instead of “tell you” say “share”
2m28s Decent crowd work
Overall: This is the shortest up front MC set ever, I got a few ok laughs and ended on a laugh. I did more time later but didn’t get to film it.
At a writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrmDfnOGkTo
0m51s Cut the fractions line
4m54s The sad delivery is better than the aggressive delivery of the DVD line
6m20s Add a “that’s ridiculous right? that’s like saying…” to make it more emotional and conversational
8m06s Find a better way to get to that ending
Overall: About as good as an open mic can go. Although the biggest laughs were from interacting with disruptive crowd members.
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=d8Rv_lCjVNM
0m49s Slow down on “take your job” pausing between each word
3m28s Try “I realize it sounds harsh, but I’ll justify it.”
7m01s Find a better wording for all this
7m56s The Shaq line doesn’t make sense
9m18s Reword to “chugs a liter of wine a night, straight out of the bottle”
Overall: Weak for a music mic, but one or two new bits towards the start did ok.
