A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JHDN7N_tG7w
0m51s Better to pick a specific person than everyone
3m29s Hit the sentence smoother
4m42s It should be “who taught you to make deductions like THAT”
6m44s Think of different angles to hit this with because the premise is funny
7m26s Point to self on “someone”
7m50s Say “OMG” instead of “oh my god”
8m18s Don’t stutter the sentence
Overall: Weak set, the anti-marriage material needs tightening
Another mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lm0aks0Wfno
1m43s Cut out “but” at the start of the sentence
3m05s Say “some” instead of “most”
6m55s Add “and it can’t come soon enough”
8m28s Cut the pile of cocaine line
Overall: Weak response, but good to say 9 minutes of reworked material out loud. I need to cut this stuff down to 4-5 minutes and then it might be funny.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EpPqVlpp6c
2m21s If improvising in between lines, restate “you’d choose divorce because” before the act out
5m08s Maybe try a reword “wow, baby, who taught you to make deductions like that?”
5m56s More emphasis on that being the best example of a relationship
Overall: Good response for a mic and for working out new/revised material
Doing the check spot
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Nb6Vp89Cplc
4m08s At least this new-ish bit went over decently
4m20s My hand should go in one circular direction the whole time
4m34s Point at self for this line
Overall: Mediocre even for checks, but at least I tried out a new joke towards the end
Going first on the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6hhCxbX8HDA
0m29s Don’t step on the laugh
1m31s More emphasis on “disappointdar”
2m35s Nice improvised line
5m01s More emphasis on “your”
6m12s He did actually wink at me
7m27s Word this sentence better
8m18s Callback totally missed, probably don’t do the face before the I hate your hair
Overall: Okay for opening a show. I got consistent laughs, but they were consistently small. And I need a smoother way to go into my last bit.
