The 9:30 Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yA9Qav5ouiE
1m25s Always nice when I can start with over a minute of off the cuff/playing off the room stuff
2m20s Add this to the joke
4m08s Nice improvised line
6m17s Put 200% at the end of a sentence
7m05s The backwards dating needs tightening/rework
Overall: Good set, the anti-marriage bit is getting tighter, the stuff right after it still needs lots of work.
Going last 2.5+ hours into the show, with most of the crowd gone
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jAQA5tS97Fc
0m24s Be more positive, don’t get the judging idea in their head, especially at the start
1m39s Unnecessary comment
3m38s Cut “full”
4m21s First say “oh yeah, well” before “I hate your hair” and the stupid shoes should be first
Overall: Weak set.
The 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k9tpTWAf4ZE
0m08s Say “thanks” first before getting into it
2m18s Head shake not head nod
4m18s Weak laughs, do a save line by this point, or call out something in the room
4m54s Cut the green card line
7m19s Cut “full time”
8m04s Pause in between each of those call backs and start with an “oh yeah?”
8m17s The poetry reading save line doesn’t make sense, and the previous save worked okay enough to end the set
Overall: Mediocre, consistent laughs but they were mostly small.
The 8pm show with about 20 audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bobkkyeK-MU
0m07s Playing off of the MC
4m17s Nice additional improvised lines
4m44s Thirty seconds of improvised lines that got laughs, wish I was always this loose
8m29s Weird compliment, but I’ll take it
9m23s Nice line
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3_Eo3QIF5yE
0m47s Try “dragging” instead of “hauling”
1m50s Change the Igor Hunchback line
2m18s Not good for the bit if improvised line is by far the biggest laugh in the bit
3m08s Instead of “doing this” say “talking about this”
4m18s Nice when a newer joke does well
4m35s Cut the green card line
6m08s Nice additional line
6m22s Looks like I found a way to get into the “scary is…” bit without doing the psycho character
7m16s It got a good laugh but only half the room
7m43s That line doesn’t make sense there cause I got a decent laugh
Overall: Great eighteen minute set. The dad custody Kazaam and anit-marriage bits didn’t do as well as my more polished bits and need some rework, but the set flowed real nice and some other newer things worked.
A bar show for about ten people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aA4NCRnvH3A
0m28s Terrible wind sound all set, ugh
3m02s Good job milking the sadness
5m11s Laundry line is a keeper, stuff before needs tightening
5m33s Make the act out more of a tantrum for the “we have to” part
Overall: Eh set, tighten the new material.
