Doing a check spot on the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F3rja3f9VX8
0m31s Weird joke to open on
0m38s Good improvised save lines
2m30s Smile a little on that line
5m43s Forgot to do the “phd in art history and a post doctorate degree in child abandonment” line first
Overall: Good for checks.
Going last at 2am at a music/comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N0ph31Pgzt0
0m40s Add a “he blew out his arm” reference
5m50s Point at self during the whole line
6m48s Add emphasis on “after”
9m47s No need for “fundraisers” end the sentence at “synagogues”
Overall: Weird set, mostly weak with a couple of good laughs.
Doing a check spot two hours into a show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nJWwc3NeobU
1m22s Could’ve played up sexual tension between siblings as a response
3m02s Could’ve asked an audience member if they had siblings, to make a smoother transition into the next bit
4m57s Change “immigrant” to “foreigner” and smile on the line
Overall: Average weak check spot response.
A writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=88yDMSOrBbg
0m50s Smile on the foreigners line
3m48s Say Shaq not Celtics, that’s not a ready association, or better yet, don’t say anything at all
5m26s Maybe slight reword to “cause I WANNA look pretty in a white dress”
Overall: Okay for a mic
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fC1RQdIiY0E
3m28s Enunciate “love” more
4m44s There might be a better word than “sadness”
5m37s Add a few words, “then a year later, it turns into…”
6m35s Reword the tizzy to something that’s a closer parallel to a marriage argument
7m38s Great yet horrible improvised line, figure out a way to put it into the act
8m01s Say “too fast” not “too far”
8m18s Change the delivery on “I know, right” like it’s the most obvious thing in the world
9m05s Every night should be at the start of the sentence
Overall: Good set, first seven minutes of pretty new material went really well. Could’ve ended stronger.
