Hosting the writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3d0uDbecows
2m31s Order of the previous minute needs a better logical grouping
3m12s Might be worth keeping “linner”
3m23s Don’t explain why they haven’t seen each other
4m48s That’s a shorter safety word joke
5m18s Say “well” before “welcome to life”
Overall: Ok for a mic and working out new material, weak ending though
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vyOFOWBlvAE
0m57s Good line
1m54s If they say yes do a “I got depression in my eye” act out
3m00s This line has been doing well lately
4m14s Good improv, try to incorporate it into future sets
5m17s Funnier if I set it up that we have one specific fan
6m19s That’s funny to incorporate
6m57s I need a dick joke that doesn’t take 45 seconds
8m51s Good statement
9m14s Don’t stumble
9m52s Could’ve done an improvised callback to “what’s up 550?”
Overall: Great set. I really interacted with the audience. I need to expand how I want to handle the “safe word” concept, but it has legs and allows for lots of improvised callbacks.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k0lTefNaDK4
1m26s Grab the mic a second sooner, or don’t touch it at all
2m10s If I had to do the save line in the middle of joke, I shouldn’t go back into it
2m25s Then I forced my way back into it again
4m52s I’m getting ok laughs, this line doesn’t make sense here
6m15s Cut “and that’s why I’m here”
Overall: Mediocre but not as horrible as I remember it going. I didn’t really have a strong set order and I jumped around jokes in a weird way, so I don’t blame them for not being with me.
Doing the “feature set of the night” for 25-30 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QjMO-9vrSLs
0m41s Nice acknowledgment
4m42s Nice improvised line about Googling yayo
5m18s I make really weird looking air quotes with my hands
6m33s Good save
8m28s Cut “and that’s why I’m here”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lFlfUz4euv8
2m21s Good additional improv line for when there wasn’t a huge laugh
2m50s Tighten this setup
4m15s Good response
5m01s Hit “difference” harder
6m08s Nice “I don’t know why”
6m34s Do the punch line quicker, before the audience gets to it like in this case
7m12s Always good when going into the Blade posture gets a laugh
10m42s If doing an accent, try to keep it consistent throughout the act out
11m49s Decent improvised act out, should make more fun of excitability of the audience member being depressed
12m34s Great improvised call back
13m12s Biggest response that line has gotten to date
14m34s Nice little in the moment line
Part 3
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Krbb8fIhrag
2m10s If I do the hula hoop twice, I should do it a third time
2m50s Funny improvised line, although a little mean
4m20s Missed a couple of words, the line should be “you get the Shaq one year legend’s deal”
5m02s Weak end to that part of the joke
5m28s Good improvised line about no service
6m44s Don’t have “right now” twice in the same sentence
9m34s Weird that that line has missed the last few times I’ve done it, need to rethink my delivery here
12m19s Not sure what she said there
12m53s When the response is convoluted like that, ask a second person before doing the Israel response
Part 4
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=URezDJRjE48
1m08s I should do this bit more often, it’s fun
2m15s Try to crowd work transition into this next time
3m31s Cut this joke, it’s the only one that totally missed
4m44s And I brought the crowd back totally
6m37s First line should be more of a throwaway
7m14s Doesn’t make sense here as I got a decent laugh
8m02s Cut “insta play”
9m15s Weird delivery on “this is me positive”
9m46s Should’ve done the face for another second or two and tried to force a big laugh
10m21s Good ending line
Overall: Great set. This is the longest set I did and the most consistent laughs I’ve gotten. Minor fixes are needed here and there, but this was very good overall.
A backroom bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XQ4emj8rPfk
0m21s Playing off of what the MC said to start
1m10s Good job incorporating an improvised part of last night’s show into tonight’s material
1m44s Don’t stumble on the line
2m23s I love that line
3m40s Change the order of these two lines
5m14s I missed the “I’m Kazaam in this example” line
5m52s I gotta find a way to always make someone in the audience a Kazaam fan
6m22s Stepped on a laugh a little bit
6m30s Do the hula hoop a second time
8m10s Best response the cell phone marriage joke has gotten to date
Overall: Great set. Newer material is hitting well. Make minor adjustments per usual
