Hosting the writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cxf4rPJ3w1g
2m57s Don’t improvise the “in touch with my feelings” line before the self aware line
3m44s Cut the elimination parts
5m14s Rewrite #6
Overall: Weak even for hosting a mic. The online profile has potential but needs to be way shorter and a lot punchier
The 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UUWXPlYrpVg
4m47s Make it prison camp not work camp
5m00s That call back is getting better but still not fully there
6m32s Could improvise a little better here but I had to finish up
Overall: Solid set, but some of the suicide bit didn’t get as strong of a laugh as I would’ve liked
MCing the 8pm show for 20 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tl3myuSI43U
2m39s Nice improvised line
2m49s Good guesses tonight
3m04s Point out that the other guy blows up his girls spot, see if they’ve met
4m49s Don’t stutter/repeat here
5m51s Good job getting out of that weird interaction
8m51s That’s a funny line
9m09s She had a nice callback to my previous joke that I didn’t pick up on fully
10m21s Change the delivery on the applied for it last week line
11m52s Add a “he’s like, now you’re entertaining me”
12m10s Doing time between comics
13m20s Stepped on a laugh, so the line didn’t hit right
Overall: Good job MCing. I weaved in and out of crowd work and material and had good energy.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OmsOvXjRQn8
1m50s Decent surround sound comment
2m18s Tell the rest of the crowd to step up their game
4m00s Make the line more of a “confessional” delivery
6m14s I had to skip half the birthday joke cause I got the light
6m45s And checks got dropped
Overall: Ok set. I feel like I connected with some of the audience but not all. Chicken pot pie is a great safe word.
Going up around 2am at a music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5lWeVD5dcbY
0m28s Good thing someone was actually from Denmark
1m56s Add “and I started getting lonely too”
2m28s Therapy is fun
2m58s That’s a good improvised line, try to reuse it
5m13s Might be decent to keep, slightly crude though
6m18s Cut this down to “the odds of this working are lower than”
7m12s There might be a better sitcom than “Growing Pains”
7m48s Add “I can take it”
Overall: Good set. The Blade bit went great at the end. The online profile has potential but needs to be tightened.
