Category: Comedy

9:30pm show

httpv://youtu.be/aCrfmboG5gc

1m19s Try changing “messed up” to “messed up-ish”

3m59s Don’t step on the laugh

4m10s Might want to pick up the imaginary hula hoop between the two hula hoop motions

4m52s Change the last line

5m15s Tighten the words and get the act out better, but the idea is there

6m30s Don’t move my hand on this act out, her arm should always be out straight

7m38s Don’t pause after “your phone”

8m12s Make the setup tighter

8m19s And this slightly clearer and less words

9m04s Needs a couple of less words

Overall: Good set but the new lines need polishing.

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bcfz0y0vKLY

0m59s Tighten this set up

1m18s Might want to describe a red zone analogy

2m51s Change the delivery on “not so smart”

Overall: Ok for a mic, keep tightening this new bit.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B-eQuU2F7TI

1m07s Work on the woman’s voice

3m50s Make “I googled it” sound more like I’m admitting a secret

5m00s Funny interaction

5m20s But that interaction will ruin that punch line, should’ve just jumped to the next part

6m55s The safe word here might be funnier cause it’s more random

7m19s Stronger act out when I say his safe word

8m35s Good line to keep, “back to the sadness”

10m23s Cut out the waiters suicide thought unless I’ve done the wood chipper joke

12m20s Not sure why the callback completely missed

Overall: Good but some lines completely missed.

Closing out the 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CzKRn2kqRHk

3m52s Stepped on a laugh a little

8m20s I need a better third dick joke

9m02s More emphasis on “special surprise”

11m39s Cut the second and third call back. End it on “your shoes are stupid.”

Overall: Solid set, the new birthday material is really coming along

Late night music and comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C4icAO7ZLWk

3m17s Add “even with you sir”

5m14s Make “karmic wheel” into “vicious cycle”

5m45s Cut #2

6m15s Cut the word “probably”

8m54s Find a way to make that funny

Overall: Nothing special Got good practice just talking for half of the set.