Category: Comedy

Going first on the 10pm show

httpv://youtu.be/obkruUIHvoA

1m21s No need for the “this conversation is done” line

3m12s Two weird stutters a few seconds apart

Overall: Consistent laughs but nothing amazing.

MCing the 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/PLwXrE-BjK8

0m56s Have her look the guy up and down first, then say the line

1m59s Always nice to get an applause break off of crowd work

4m10s The carousel is a new line, think about the best wording for it

5m14s I can definitely dig deeper about the Brooklyn

6m28s Don’t do crazy eyes, do scared eyes

7m08s Weird pause before “bought my plane ticket”

8m07s The save line doesn’t fully make sense here as I got some laughs

Doing time between comics and the check spot

httpv://youtu.be/S93DIquG3zE

0m49s The act out should be more depressed about getting it in your eye

1m56s This has become one of my biggest laughs

3m59s I bailed on part of a joke

5m29s It should be “you just wanna” not “you wanna just”

6m08s Decent improvised line, might want to add that in

8m10s Tell her “happy birthday” before going into my bit

9m19s Good improv on this, might be the way to handle when nobody volunteers a safe word

Overall: Very good MCing set. And the check spot and time between comics went well too.

A late night music and comedy mic

httpv://youtu.be/2K–ZGOY0h8

1m08s Good hula hoop work this time

1m19s Get lost touching my own face

2m27s Feels too forced, figure out a different way to do this

4m09s Could’ve pointed this out earlier

4m48s Sound more positive about this

4m54s Shift down and sad for “on the only window”

5m10s Third date needs to be different

Overall: Ok for three in the morning, but the new lines need a rewrite

An open mic

httpv://youtu.be/4Ur8vGKA84g

0m29s Don’t step on the laugh

0m38s Do better object work: spin the hula hoop at the top first

1m45s The sarcasm should be heavier or change the idea

3m02s Tighten the wording on this

3m48s Sound happier about this, like I’m selling her on it

Overall: Good for a mic, but the 3 or 4 new lines I tried on older jokes didn’t work.

A bar show for 5 people

httpv://youtu.be/UjKwaGAve3I

1m05s No need to repeat the vote

1m41s Don’t go up at the end of the sentence

2m28s Not sure if I should repeat questions if nobody responds with “why”

3m32s Get sadder on the hula hoop falling down

3m56s Touch my face more when saying that

4m33s Change “virginal princess” to something funnier

4m44s Deliver this with more sarcasm

4m52s Sell the nausea better

8m01s Good self acknowledgement

8m19s Set this up with less words

8m39s Think up a funnier second date

8m56s Improvise better sock puppets and make it a conversation

Overall: Good considering there were only five audience members. And I managed to have fun.