Category: Comedy

Going up 2 hours into the 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Dz_F4moKqPA

0m17s Great improvised line for when I go up late in a show, make sure to reuse this

0m34s Get the setup clearer

1m22s No need to comment on the intelligence

1m41s Make the 2 to 3 to 2 finger motion clearer and without hand movement

2m03s Try “no, never, go do your homework” without pausing

3m57s Consider saying cycle before the hand grab motion

4m03s Commit to the kissy face for three seconds instead of one second

5m09s Consider cutting the Notebook line, laughs aren’t that strong

5m47s Change delivery when giving the scenario

6m10s Cut the range and bars lines

7m10s Smile and look at the crowd while waiting for the MC to return

Overall: Solid set with consistent laughs, could still use adjustments

A 7pm show

httpv://youtu.be/P328s_huh4M

1m07s Pause after “Russian” and again after “immigrant”

1m38s Try doing “no, never, go do your homework” in Russian accent

3m03s She should stop smiling on the “son have doctorate” line

3m31s Commit to the kissy face for 3 seconds

3m42s Hit “sixth” harder

4m10s Smile on the whole threesome line

4m40s Reverse brunch and shoe shopping

4m50s Do a heavier eye roll

Overall: Good set but the first half was stronger than the second half.

Hosting the writer’s mic

httpv://youtu.be/UntJbYEiPDM

1m06s Don’t move the hands as much so it’s easier to see the two->three->two fingers

2m15s Cut the pet bear line

3m25s Milk the kissy face gesture for longer

3m37s Don’t say “right up front” twice in the same sentence

4m00s Hit future harder

Overall: Decent for an open mic

The 10pm show

httpv://youtu.be/h0SFbotdRa8

1m55s Change the hit man and car lines, as those laughs are significantly lower than the previous ones

2m49s I don’t need the professor part in here

5m25s Say “our” instead of “the”

5m47s Hit “future” harder

7m00s Smile right from the start of the song

7m22s Don’t tap the mic

7m46s Save line not needed here as I got a decent laugh on the previous line

Overall: Good solid set. The last thirty seconds could’ve been stronger though.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/eG_svgN9qQU

1m28s Tighten the sentence

2m59s I can tighten the exaggeration sentence

5m46s Emphasize “phone” to make it clear I’m no longer referring to a phone

Overall: Decent set with consistent laughs but no huge laughs.