Category: Comedy

Doing checks during the 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/nJynnSeVv0s

0m21s Don’t open with this, there’s nowhere to go if it misses

3m40s Good job addressing the talking

4m12s Blink eyelids more

Overall: Good for checks

Late night music mic

httpv://youtu.be/GJjfxluYFfg

4m08s Rewrite the previous minute

5m16s To streamline it, if someone else yells out a safe word, they can become the new sadness member of the audience

6m27s Need a better punch line

7m00s Try saying the dead lines while smiling

Overall: Mediocre. Worked out a bunch of rewrites, that still need rewrites.

A bar show for 8 or 10 people

httpv://youtu.be/zfG75AebyqA

0m32s Could’ve gone with “so only one of you lays pipe in Thailand”

2m54s Say “some of you” instead of “a few of you”

3m18s If going from “Russian prison camp” to Blade, I can repeat the word “prison”

3m42s Move the eyes around more

4m48s Weird angle of leaning towards him

Overall: Weak set. I tried crowd work up front but should’ve gone back into it later on.

A 9pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Mu6qNjvlyr8

1m41s The “do your homework” in an accent isn’t funnier than without the accent

3m18s The pause between “cycle” and “of sadness” doesn’t work

3m53s Needs a better ending than “like your name”

5m51s Cut the marriages have been around for thousands of years part

Overall: Mediocre set. Could’ve tried doing real crowd work but I was working out bits.

Going up 2.5+ hours into a show for the few remaining people

httpv://youtu.be/B-P_73aLCBM

3m18s “Night after night” isn’t strong enough to be it’s own punch line

3m41s Cut “and he spoke English”

4m10s I can go straight to “moved fifty miles away” without the previous sentence.

Overall: Terrible even for the six or eight people there.