Performance Critique: May 7c

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f-_59X6226Y

3m06s Good job getting an unscripted laugh to get out of a joke half failing

7m29s Kill the restaurant to girl comparison

7m42s Good job ending on a laugh

Overall: This was a weak set. I’m getting small laughs throughout, which is better than no laughs, but there wasn’t a single big group laugh during my set.

Performance Critique: May 7b

Opening at the 6:30 Show for 12-15 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7I42K5eNOxc

2m59s I’m not a huge fan of this joke, but it tends to win back a crowd

5m08s Good job calling out a situation

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-ZHlAscdPXM

Overall: The set had as many ups as downs, but I did a good job of calling out the situations that occurred during the set (the guy moving at the start, the “awwwing” at coke and the woman not paying attention) and most of the crowd seemed to be along for the ride.

Performance Critique: May 7a

Friday Open Mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AbGL5ojSeZg

0m27s Try to introduce this character

0m42s Say “crazy” not “murderous rage”

1m32s Commit more to the “blurry blurry dark dark” bit

3m38s After “I haven’t done it in a while” add on “and now I remember why”

Overall: The sand joke and the immigrant excuse joke both need work

Performance Critique: May 6b

The Music and Comedy Late Night Mic Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LjUfsJzYUUA

0m16s That’s a great way to be likeable right away

0m33s It was funny when I said it in conversation, but it didn’t work on stage

2m50s This is working really well

3m23s Get rid of the “had to get a drink of water”

4m09s That didn’t deserve an applause break, but I’ll take it

5m09s Get rid of the mail/queue part

5m38s I did the “remix” thing enough times until it got funny

7m28s Get rid of the restaurant like girls comparison

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1SZbZfAyyq8

0m43s Change to “hire a hit man”

3m57s If the tap dancing gets a big laugh, I need a different line than “I’m in the market for a new mom”

4m46s Put more emotion behind “we didn’t even own a chess set”

7m03s I need to figure out a way to do this joke without seeming mean

7m53s The gym joke is much weaker than the rest of my mom material

8m28s This didn’t work cause I had already been a little mean on my last joke

Overall: Really solid set, I just need to be careful about not losing the audience by going too mean without justification.

My Writing Process

Here’s my current comedy writing process, hopefully this is helpful to someone.

The Daily:

Every morning, when I wake up and before I have breakfast, I write three pages of stream of consciousness by hand. My goal is to just write for fifteen minutes without stopping my pen. Anything goes in this and I really try not to judge it. Most of the stuff I write isn’t even an attempt at a joke, but occasional funny ideas pop into there, and the more important thing it does is get the writing momentum going for the day.writing-center

Whenever I notice something, think of something or something happens to me that I find funny, I write it down. Usually I type it into the notes feature on my phone, but sometimes if I have a notepad with me, I’ll write it on that. I usually note between 1 and 5 funny things each day.

The Weekly:

I’ll email my newest notes myself once a week and then go through each idea. If an idea still seems funny to me, I go through it that one idea a few times and rewrite it as a stand up bit. If I like the joke, I’ll move it into my joke file, and put it under the “new jokes” header. If I don’t like the new joke or if an original note is completely uninspiring, I cut and paste them into a file of “New Jokes that are still forming” (aka the junkyard). If an idea seems better as a sketch, I put it in a file called “Sketch Ideas” and before my weekly sketch group meeting, I go through that file to write a sketch.

I have a weekly stand up writing group, and I work out my newest jokes there and discuss them. More than half of the jokes that I bring in there, I never even try at an open mic, cause I can see they don’t work. We’ll discuss a joke at the writing group, I’ll take notes and I’ll either rewrite it or put it into the “still forming” pile.

If the joke passes the writers group, I’ll try it at an open mic (after I’ve said it aloud to myself five or ten times to more or less memorize it). I analyze how the joke sounds and feels the first time on stage, and if I still like it, I’ll keep doing it at mics and random bar shows. If the joke keeps working, it starts to go into my “better shows” set. Otherwise, it eventually ends up in the “still forming” pile.

I try to go through my existing jokes once a week and see if I have any updates to them, because I usually make a change in a live set before I make it in my file.

And whenever I work on a new joke or a complete rewrite of an existing joke, I create a new word document where I only have that joke there, so I don’t get distracted by looking at other jokes.

Once a week, I review my videos, and write the performance critiques. (I count this as part of my stand up writing.) While I watch the videos, I’ll have my joke file open and edit it down on the spot.

The Actual Writing

I talk into my mic as I write and when I practice the jokes, I’ll do them without looking at the word file. Sometimes I’ll come up with additional punch lines when I’m practicing memorizing the new material. Talking into the mic helps this “writing on your feet” process more than just talking aloud.

Accessing Jokes

I keep a copy of my latest version of my jokes on Google Docs so then I can access my entire joke file on my phone wherever I am.

How do you do your stand up writing? I’m always looking for new ideas on how to be more productive…

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