A Friday Night Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ie376QaSFUg
1m45s I might wanna try the line without the pause
5m05s Get rid of “anal” and don’t say “wine” before “spit or swallow”
5m43s Fully turning my head and going right into it makes this line funnier
7m18s Say “Jewel” instead of “she”
7m53s Need a stronger punch than “straight jacket”
Overall: Great set with steady laughs throughout, but the Jewel joke could be made funnier
A Friday afternoon mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1a-TPia9VEk
0m36s Say “subtle” not “casual”
1m50s Pause for half a second after “ohhh the multimillionaire club”
3m07s Get rid of the mascara line
3m41s Think of something else instead of Mercedes
6m31s Out of five or seven times I’ve told this joke, this is the only time it worked. Too bad non-comedian audiences don’t usually request jokes…
Overall: Another practice rep at an open mic
Late night music and comedy
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FEO3FBKfZog
2m07s The third one needs to be more of a twist
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aX3H3FBQvMA
0m46s Combine this to one sentence “can I upgrade to contract in two years from…”
2m31s I’m not hitting the last word of each punch line hard enough
Overall: I started out strong when making fun of people in the room, but the material was up and down
An open mic with five comics
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OuCcgpV7Vu0
1m18s I wanted to try the “I just don’t care” tag, not happy with it
3m03s I like how I spent a longer amount of time work shopping a joke than doing it
3m32s Instead of “I did this the other night” say “I said this the other night”
4m32s This is usually how I talk about a joke off stage…
5m41s This joke doesn’t seem like a keeper
Overall: I made the best of a low energy mic and work shopped a joke while on stage
A late night prom show for high school kids
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_F3rK6Jx_E0
0m08s Don’t start with calling out the shitty clap, unless there’s a better punch line
2m21s I could’ve been more conversational here, and asked if anyone was going to college cause they don’t wanna get their ass kicked
3m06s No need to say that, if I’m gonna go that way, I should say “I guess I can’t buy coke here”
4m43s I went into this a bit too much, no need for all this
5m13s Change “sometimes” to “I used to”
6m43s Not sure why this big punch line completely missed
7m24s Say “partners” not “hookups”
8m47s Me telling high school kids the website for escorts is funny, even if they didn’t laugh
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RXGQDf0G66c
0m24s Don’t say that part
Overall: I got some laughs but I never got good laughter momentum and I called the crowd out too much on being in high school and possibly not having had some experiences (once would be too much, I did it two or three times)
