The Friday 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H-1pn_E8kK0
2m38s Add “cause” before “Jesus would’ve wanted”
3m21s Get rid of “for son”
3m42s My mom’s dialogue here could be funnier
5m27s The checks are a dropping
6m54s Good job getting a laugh before getting off stage
Overall: Solid first 5 minutes then the checks dropped but I still went out on a laugh. The Jewel joke needs to be tighter.
The late night music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DAQ_pVbE5GA
1m52s Tighten “guys you feel lukewarm about” to one or two words
4m06s Get rid of the “remix” thing
7m38s That’s an awesome shut down line
8m36s Change the tag
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ra2TkcSmXkg
2m25s I need the word “cause” before “Jesus would’ve wanted”
3m06s I don’t need “for son” at the end of the sentence
5m04s Change “just as much” to “more than”
Overall: Decent considering it was past 4am. And my stop talking line made me laugh when re-watching the video.
A feedback mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9H2Jlh1A_5s
0m38s Think of something else instead of French Fries
0m59s Get something shorter than “Guys you feel lukewarm about”
1m26s Try “You can come with scare-free orgasms”
1m52 I need less words for the punch than “play with fire”
1m59s Change the second example
2m56s This joke might not be worth keeping
Overall: Decent. The Fox News joke will be good when I get the right first two examples, the iPhone throw needs a little work, and the jogging bit might need to be cut.
Music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YDiBbXXg_5I
1m31s Cause the guy was asian
7m07s Good job referencing previous crowd work
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UWFuyIAAimI
0m24s Don’t say “terrible” two sentences in a row
Overall: Nice long 17 minute set with more or less steady (although small) laughs throughout
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kD8gZT4UH0k
2m22s Add “because” before “Jesus would’ve wanted…”
5m44s Too wordy
6m41s Decent call back
Overall: Decent, but not great. I tried doing a lot of mom stuff in a row and it got a bit repetitive, even for me.
