A Saturday 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AhQMuuER4Zw
1m49s Look up a little more
4m03s I need a different punchline
4m25s Say “audience member” not “audience”
5m03s Cut this punchline
6m16s No need for the third “I believe you”
6m42s The funnier full line would be “I think I’d run out of here… with twenty bucks”
7m29s Pause longer between each “nobody believes me”
Overall: Ehh. The Jewel joke is hurting my set.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-6XmLO90UsQ
0m12s The guy before me ended his set by stripping to his boxers, so I addressed it
1m50s Say “the left side of the room in this case,” it’s less words
2m15s Say that line way slower
3m13s “Glamour god bible” is awkward sounding
6m28s It took way too long and not enough laughs to get to this laugh
Overall: Decent but the Jewel bit needs to be tighter and funnier.
A 6:30 show with eight audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=F67YbBRseHY
1m36s Such a long delay before they get it
2m27s Awkward wording, fix it
4m19s Reword to “not just anyone can pull of that look: Capri sweatpants”
6m19s Slow down between saying each review snippet and doing the act
Overall: Good set considering it was a small audience and I was interrupted a few times. I did a good job of not returning to jokes when interrupted and just going into a different one.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3FJUio7_g54
1m36s My mom’s movements should have a purpose
1m49s I don’t need the tag of “or is legally allowed to”
3m01s Say the sentence smoothly without the “what do I say next” pause in the middle
5m19s Change this line
Overall: Ten minutes is ten minutes
Late night music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ijhKr67RzXg
3m28s Say “college professor” not “academic” as not everyone knows what an academic is
5m44s Needs a better punchline after “basically”
6m58s End the sentence on “notice there’s less liquid”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hzeehzzYXcw
Overall: Decent for 3am
