The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RAuE4Dy0xTY
2m43s Missed the word “like” before knocking
3m52s Change to “When’d you see Shrek?”
4m18s If the fake out doesn’t wwork like here, over explain it even more
6m41s Take a beat between “I like that one too” and my next line
8m35s This joke isn’t ready for prime time
9m22s I got the light and ended but the MC wasn’t in the room so I couldn’t leave the stage
Overall: Decent but awkward ending
A warm up mic before a real show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NtYem8-4EYU
1m56s Say this before the “I actually love my dad” line
2m53s Make the sound effects and make the concept clearer
4m42s Change heroin to something more believable
Overall: Tighten the jokes.
A third mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VRqBvRw1q_s
0m57s The “What are you up to?” doesn’t fit
3m20s Pause a little longer after this one
Overall: Working out the same jokes a few times in one night, they still need work
Another mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B987Y_jHzME
0m43s Change “rough” to “tough”
1m34s Cut the genre part
3m04s Sell the “I’m gonna fast forward this” more
3m59s Get rid of the “I know that intellectually” part
4m26s Cut the Kant joke
5m23s This joke needs a stronger end
Overall: Decent. These jokes could use some trimming though.
The worst mic in the city
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FcAPXRM8R9w
0m33s At a dead mic, the best shot at laughs or at least getting people to listen is commenting on previous comic’s material
2m31s Say “you can pay for this, right?” instead of “you got this, right?”
2m48s Do the sound effect right after I say “fast forward” for the first time
5m29s Word this better
Overall: Stage time is stage time, or so I keep telling myself.
