Category: Comedy

Going up first at my Queens show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0lKrnVV_nUg

0m13s There was an actual infant in the audience

1m18s Move the location of my hands between each line and make it a Venn diagram

1m59s Perfectly played

2m47s Try doing a “pow pow” mini gun motion

3m48s Cut the previous thirty seconds about midnight sails and all

4m30s Pause after “and the yellow ones”, there’s an extra laugh there

6m05s Hammer it home by going “the Hitler mustache ok, but back of the van is no good?”

7m39s Rephrase to “actual chart in her bedroom like an NFL draft room”

8m00s Cut down a few of these examples

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CcpYaDIW-bI

1m18s This joke needs some work, but at least it didn’t turn the crowd, which it could’ve

Overall: I did mostly new or rewritten material and it went over fairly well. I need to cut the second half of the millionaire joke and the ID’s joke needs rework.

Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bPKkEfGx7Pc

1m34s Get rid of the earthworm thing

2m12s Make that an actual sentence

3m22s It should be the same form of “exploiting” twice in a row

3m33s Get rid of the boomshakalaka

Overall: These newer jokes need some rework but have potential.

The 8PM show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FZtoSufsn_U

1m24s iPhone joke is finally hitting hard

5m54s Weird that this first one got an “ooooo”

6m58s This might be better than a regular chef

8m18s Lost them on the second half of Netflix

Overall: The first five and half minutes were great, then I did the newer and edgier jokes which didn’t hit as hard. I need to learn how to better handle and acknowledge the “ooos”

The 8PM show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ku4cOQvQjGA

2m39s Drag out “freezing” for longer

4m06s Go into the difference between “stories” and “jokes” for a little

4m38s Pause for the “oooo” to stop before getting to the next one, or else it feels like I’m trying to barrel through it

4m55s It should be “turn it down a notch” not “go back a notch”

5m39s Great job calling out the situation

5m48s Go into him apologizing more

6m46s That joke needs a stronger ending

7m08s Hold that last pose for longer

7m42s I’m going too fast

8m05s Good job ending on a big laugh

Overall: Good but I had three jokes that got “oooos” and I didn’t fully respond to it. Since a lot of my jokes walk the line, I need to figure out a way to always be ready for the Oooo / groan….

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cVglj7XvyBU

0m33s I could’ve added, “no, unemployed and interviewing?”

1m17s Try, “she’d probably come back with a shareholders report”

4m11s Get rid of “I got it from Ikea”

5m50s I need to make it clearer that I’m combining cell phone plans and child adoptions

Overall: I did newer jokes and they’re getting there but need some rewriting