Category: Comedy

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=09dVkl9ThbY

0m43s Good job addressing the situation, as I could see people turning around and looking

1m36s It’s always fun to make up what the audience is saying, the key is to do it quickly before they actually say something and correct you

3m45s This is working really well now

4m33s I can throw in a joke about the waitresses here too

4m54s Call out the guy who’s applauding

6m14s An applause break during checks is pretty rare

6m42s I might want to address the “whoooo…” and make a joke about it

Overall: I was doing great til the checks came then I did just okay, but at least I was able to keep partial attention throughout checks

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a60_zAlGOGg

5m28s Try saying, “it’s okay, it’s starting to turn me on”

5m46s Pause before “so I just bought them all”

6m26s Keep the same voice throughout that line

6m54s Call out the “half the room is republican” thing

Overall: Weird set. The laughs weren’t as loud as usual but I got a couple of short applause breaks. At least I didn’t get unexpected groans during the shoes joke.

A bar show in a hot room without air conditioning

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=h0Z1AKr0jJI

1m55s Call it a Venn diagram

2m10s Make my bar chart smaller

3m22s Cut this line

4m10s And cut everything from the previous note to here

6m08s The van joke needs to be clearer, people are missing my whole confounding / combining cell phone plans and child adoption

6m44s Slightly meaner than needed

Overall: This is why you shouldn’t do a bunch of untested jokes in a row at a real show. There is a lot of fat on these newer jokes that needs trimming and rewriting.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V-Nnd3BPgo8

2m33s Get rid of the medals and podium line

3m05s Make this a smoother transition from x games to used cars

3m25s Get rid of the lemon part

3m55s Get rid of “a pop”

5m08s Meaner than necessary

Overall: Working out some newer stuff, it needs to get shorter

Opening for 30 minutes for a sketch group

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7kobtGCAqpc

0m01s True story, the tape started 5 seconds after I got brought up

2m35s Nice improvised callback

6m07s Pause before “So I just”

6m56s Great job addressing a heckle and turning it into a win for me

7m42s That’s the best response this line has gotten

8m20s Don’t step on the laughs

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tqjM8OPGyIw

0m59s Say “I told you we’d get to the groaning part”

1m10s Add “cause she’s instant play”

2m07s No need for the “so drunk you forget” line

3m59s Good improvised line

4m49s Cut the last 50 seconds

7m40s This is a b joke, it needs a rewrite

8m32s Say the line more playfully

8m45s Too mean, no need for that

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ffqil6r9Klk

0m09s Weird transition question, wasn’t even a full sentence

1m29s I need more bombing lines for a longer set, or more quality material

2m15s Good laugh considering I thought I lost them

2m28s I need another line after “shit happens”

3m10s The 57 point inspection needs to be setup clearer

3m22s Get rid of the brakes line

6m35s I should’ve gone to the second part of the joke about “cancel relationship” as I was getting more sympathy

7m17s I don’t need the “cause” there

9m29s Don’t react angrily, say it jokingly

Part 4

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pevo4Z0ANhs

1m08s I blew the line

1m16s Bail out of the joke if a big punch line is blown that confuses two future punch lines

Overall: I did 31 minutes without any notes and did great for the first 15. I wasn’t as prepared as I could’ve been because I was just remembering jokes as I went along after 20 minutes and too many of them in a row were about sex. I also remembered why I rarely do my older material…