A Friday open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BzAu-R4E3aU
1m22s I need something else in there instead of “nice rack”
1m44s Say “girls I hook up with” not just “girls” it’s not clear enough
2m10s Do something instead of broccoli
3m22s Waaaay to wordy, although maybe it’s so wordy that it’s funny
Overall: Average response for an open mic. The millionaire joke needs a better line towards the end.
Late night music mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tuQjwn4Zx8c
1m33s I could do the shaking head comment of “you’re shaking your head like, there’s no way you’ll last that long”
2m38s Do the bar chart motion more than once
2m45s Nicely improvised save line that I can reuse
2m57s Don’t single out one person for “you’re a dick” make it the whole crowd
3m36s I need stronger “neuro” examples
4m05s Great call back line, worked the first time I did it
4m48s The end of the joke should be at “neuro war profiteering”
5m27s Wording should be “I just bought them all”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OJW09xET0uc
0m36s I improvised that line, and it’s a keeper
1m14s I need a different line instead of the rack
3m07s Make like I’m driving a car or something
Part 3
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oI6JIWEkeCA
0m01s They brought me up a second time after the rest of the performers went up
0m30s I’m stalling til at least one person is listening
9m17s Good save to turn an “ooo” into a laugh
Part 4
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=auSX4XFxa1A
4m05s I tried writing on stage, it didn’t work but it was fun
Overall: The first time I went up on stage went well enough but the second time at the end of the show (Part 3 and Part 4) it was hard to bring people’s attention back.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U7NN9ScmgyE
1m00s Use two hands for the different parts of the Venn Diagram
2m42s Cut the kegger line
2m56s This line is a keeper
3m50s Kill the whole part after war profiteering
4m29s Be more playful on this last line
6m03s Don’t step on the laughs
Overall: Great for a mic. I found the key line in the ID joke and now know where to go with the joke.
A music mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gbhvjHuTxII
4m38s I need to figure out a way to get the math line into a different joke
5m09s Too unrealistic to get a laugh
5m18s At least I can bring them back after a new joke that isn’t working yet
6m58s Instead of “did this” say “talked about this”
8m12s Make a clearer bar chart
9m02s Make a pistol shooting motion
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5trqnewPTUc
1m39s Don’t do the second part if they don’t laugh at “perfect” I should know this by now, and this is a reason to no longer have this be my closing joke.
2m47s Instead of “she” say “Jenny”
Overall: Started strong, lost them on a new joke, brought them back, lost them again, brought them back, then lost them for the last two minutes.
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JdTcLptLbPI
4m19s I need a little more set up for this joke
5m16s Cut this line
5m28s At least I’m able to bring the crowd back
6m13s Try saying, “the tight ones don’t groan… sorry to give away your secret…”
7m45s Make a better remote control
9m10s I shouldn’t go for the second part if they don’t laugh at “perfect”
Overall: I lost the crowd twice but was able to bring them back twice. It’s better not to lose the crowd at all, but it’s good to know I can bring them back.
