Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rDQe52Fay3A
1m30s I need to figure out a way to make this joke funny, I think the setup is off
2m33s Change neurocomic to something else
Overall: The mobile adoption center still needs to hit and my neuro examples could use some work
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7cihw37JcRs
3m22s The pinky and eyebrow raise is funny
6m21s The fundraiser line is a good improvised line
6m31s The start to this joke is weird
8m28s If they laugh really hard, I don’t need to do the motion
9m29s The iPhone app part of this joke needs to be rewritten or killed
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HhmbrSiiwks
1m15s The DVR joke needs to be funnier
1m27s Say “it’s the Netflix plan” not just “Netflix plan”
Overall: Very solid set. The the iPhone part of the Yelp joke needs fixing as does the DVR joke, but everything else is solid.
MCing a midnight show in the basement of a bar
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PIX027g0KhY
0m38s I should say “Florida isn’t much better than Detroit”
1m08s Say “Hi ladies” before the disappoint twice line
4m07s Address the girls yelling in the background
4m15s Good job shifting back to crowd work after a joke didn’t go great
6m05s Mixed up the “you” and “her” terms, but it still worked
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6v6uVZjpwgM
0m07s I could’ve played that Cliff doesn’t start with a “K”
3m01s Comment on the words getting stuck that just happened
3m31s Instead of “I did this” say “I talked about this”
Overall: Good job mixing in crowd work with material while hosting, but I could’ve done more crowd work towards the end. The last five minutes I only did material and I should try to engaged the audience more.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4cKTLbP25F8
0m22s Call out the “woo” more, like “why are you proud of that?” or something
1m35s Good job on dealing with the disruption
4m08s Nice improvised line
5m29s Don’t do a third mom joke when the first two barely got laughs
Overall: Bad set. I got interrupted once and addressed it well but then I continued with my mother material when it was clearly not working, I should’ve tried switching topics earlier
A Friday 6:30 show for ten or fifteen people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aCFfl0BnTbc
2m49s Weird that the plane line completely missed when everything else is hitting
4m47s I improvised “cash only”, I should keep it
6m36s Call out the girl that wooed on it
7m11s Extra explanation of DVR didn’t lead to extra laughs
8m59s Turn to the side for “second door on your right”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E4njCXzQ_ms
1m17s Learn to save my closer for the last joke instead of doing it earlier, otherwise I won’t end as strong as I can
Overall: Solid eleven minute set, the DVR relationship joke needs work and the neuro joke still needs some tweeking
