An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V-Nnd3BPgo8
2m33s Get rid of the medals and podium line
3m05s Make this a smoother transition from x games to used cars
3m25s Get rid of the lemon part
3m55s Get rid of “a pop”
5m08s Meaner than necessary
Overall: Working out some newer stuff, it needs to get shorter
Opening for 30 minutes for a sketch group
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7kobtGCAqpc
0m01s True story, the tape started 5 seconds after I got brought up
2m35s Nice improvised callback
6m07s Pause before “So I just”
6m56s Great job addressing a heckle and turning it into a win for me
7m42s That’s the best response this line has gotten
8m20s Don’t step on the laughs
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tqjM8OPGyIw
0m59s Say “I told you we’d get to the groaning part”
1m10s Add “cause she’s instant play”
2m07s No need for the “so drunk you forget” line
3m59s Good improvised line
4m49s Cut the last 50 seconds
7m40s This is a b joke, it needs a rewrite
8m32s Say the line more playfully
8m45s Too mean, no need for that
Part 3
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ffqil6r9Klk
0m09s Weird transition question, wasn’t even a full sentence
1m29s I need more bombing lines for a longer set, or more quality material
2m15s Good laugh considering I thought I lost them
2m28s I need another line after “shit happens”
3m10s The 57 point inspection needs to be setup clearer
3m22s Get rid of the brakes line
6m35s I should’ve gone to the second part of the joke about “cancel relationship” as I was getting more sympathy
7m17s I don’t need the “cause” there
9m29s Don’t react angrily, say it jokingly
Part 4
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Pevo4Z0ANhs
1m08s I blew the line
1m16s Bail out of the joke if a big punch line is blown that confuses two future punch lines
Overall: I did 31 minutes without any notes and did great for the first 15. I wasn’t as prepared as I could’ve been because I was just remembering jokes as I went along after 20 minutes and too many of them in a row were about sex. I also remembered why I rarely do my older material…
Going up first at my Queens show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0lKrnVV_nUg
0m13s There was an actual infant in the audience
1m18s Move the location of my hands between each line and make it a Venn diagram
1m59s Perfectly played
2m47s Try doing a “pow pow” mini gun motion
3m48s Cut the previous thirty seconds about midnight sails and all
4m30s Pause after “and the yellow ones”, there’s an extra laugh there
6m05s Hammer it home by going “the Hitler mustache ok, but back of the van is no good?”
7m39s Rephrase to “actual chart in her bedroom like an NFL draft room”
8m00s Cut down a few of these examples
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CcpYaDIW-bI
1m18s This joke needs some work, but at least it didn’t turn the crowd, which it could’ve
Overall: I did mostly new or rewritten material and it went over fairly well. I need to cut the second half of the millionaire joke and the ID’s joke needs rework.
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bPKkEfGx7Pc
1m34s Get rid of the earthworm thing
2m12s Make that an actual sentence
3m22s It should be the same form of “exploiting” twice in a row
3m33s Get rid of the boomshakalaka
Overall: These newer jokes need some rework but have potential.
The 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FZtoSufsn_U
1m24s iPhone joke is finally hitting hard
5m54s Weird that this first one got an “ooooo”
6m58s This might be better than a regular chef
8m18s Lost them on the second half of Netflix
Overall: The first five and half minutes were great, then I did the newer and edgier jokes which didn’t hit as hard. I need to learn how to better handle and acknowledge the “ooos”
