The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4cKTLbP25F8
0m22s Call out the “woo” more, like “why are you proud of that?” or something
1m35s Good job on dealing with the disruption
4m08s Nice improvised line
5m29s Don’t do a third mom joke when the first two barely got laughs
Overall: Bad set. I got interrupted once and addressed it well but then I continued with my mother material when it was clearly not working, I should’ve tried switching topics earlier
A Friday 6:30 show for ten or fifteen people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aCFfl0BnTbc
2m49s Weird that the plane line completely missed when everything else is hitting
4m47s I improvised “cash only”, I should keep it
6m36s Call out the girl that wooed on it
7m11s Extra explanation of DVR didn’t lead to extra laughs
8m59s Turn to the side for “second door on your right”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E4njCXzQ_ms
1m17s Learn to save my closer for the last joke instead of doing it earlier, otherwise I won’t end as strong as I can
Overall: Solid eleven minute set, the DVR relationship joke needs work and the neuro joke still needs some tweeking
A Friday open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BzAu-R4E3aU
1m22s I need something else in there instead of “nice rack”
1m44s Say “girls I hook up with” not just “girls” it’s not clear enough
2m10s Do something instead of broccoli
3m22s Waaaay to wordy, although maybe it’s so wordy that it’s funny
Overall: Average response for an open mic. The millionaire joke needs a better line towards the end.
Late night music mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tuQjwn4Zx8c
1m33s I could do the shaking head comment of “you’re shaking your head like, there’s no way you’ll last that long”
2m38s Do the bar chart motion more than once
2m45s Nicely improvised save line that I can reuse
2m57s Don’t single out one person for “you’re a dick” make it the whole crowd
3m36s I need stronger “neuro” examples
4m05s Great call back line, worked the first time I did it
4m48s The end of the joke should be at “neuro war profiteering”
5m27s Wording should be “I just bought them all”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OJW09xET0uc
0m36s I improvised that line, and it’s a keeper
1m14s I need a different line instead of the rack
3m07s Make like I’m driving a car or something
Part 3
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oI6JIWEkeCA
0m01s They brought me up a second time after the rest of the performers went up
0m30s I’m stalling til at least one person is listening
9m17s Good save to turn an “ooo” into a laugh
Part 4
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=auSX4XFxa1A
4m05s I tried writing on stage, it didn’t work but it was fun
Overall: The first time I went up on stage went well enough but the second time at the end of the show (Part 3 and Part 4) it was hard to bring people’s attention back.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U7NN9ScmgyE
1m00s Use two hands for the different parts of the Venn Diagram
2m42s Cut the kegger line
2m56s This line is a keeper
3m50s Kill the whole part after war profiteering
4m29s Be more playful on this last line
6m03s Don’t step on the laughs
Overall: Great for a mic. I found the key line in the ID joke and now know where to go with the joke.
