A mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ahv-6ztCgJA
1m16s No need for the fake boobs line
1m48s Kill the spreadsheet and winning formula tags
4m08s It’s not clear that she’s clicking a mouse button, probably better to make it a photo album
4m42s Say “oh look, it’s real live sand”
4m59s Show more surprise on that one
Overall: Eh, just working stuff out at a mic.
A show for 10-12 people at a bowling alley
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UnOBcZITpDY
0m14s That was a reference to something the host said, but it was five minutes before he brought me up, so it didn’t make sense anymore
1m19s Look at the same person when starting this, so it looks like I was just continuing their student loan conversation
3m51s Hit the mom lines harder
6m14s This needs a smoother intro
8m22s I need to change “prompt service” to something else, it consistently gets minimum laughs
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L3wCR0F1lvQ
0m20s Change the “notch on my spreadsheet”
0m37s Keep looking at the same person for the second line of “all I know is…”
Overall: Mediocre to averageish, I lost them in the middle of the set for a bit and could’ve done a little more crowd work.
Going first at a music mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m6qm6uxXzO4
0m59s Get from x games to ford focus in way less time
2m00s Change the tequila shots tag
3m07s Change Halo to coffee or something
6m05s Talk to them a little bit instead of going into another joke, especially when a couple in a row haven’t really hit
7m06s Should’ve acknowledged this two minutes earlier
8m28s I could’ve done more with that “it used to be twenty”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f9b6Ozbscks
Overall: I lost the crowd early on and never got them back. It didn’t help that I wanted to do mostly newer/less polished jokes.
A mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ki6ai9d2IV8
1m48s Cut the NFL Draft Room reference or make it clearer
2m18s Do a driving motion during this act out
Overall: That voting joke at the start has potential but needs work
Doing a set at my Queens show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=edvQpKoJAoY
1m19s Since Halo isn’t crucial to the joke, pick something else that everyone has waited online for
2m16s Make this sentence clearer
3m35s Change the spreadsheet and winning formula lines
8m42s What I just said should’ve gone after “businessman” ten seconds later
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jlt1DxBtVC4
0m25s Only do “and nobody believes me” twice, not three times
2m05s After “pause” say “Ben” before saying “I didn’t get you anything”
3m19s Change “you’re not funny” to “I don’t appreciate your jokes”
Overall: Eh, slightly below average but the crowd work up front was good.
