Category: Comedy

The 8pm show, about 15-20 audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GaiFmqVQ8zo

4m05s When the woman says “I don’t think so” I should’ve responded, “Give it two drinks”

6m45s Give a little bit more of a smile during this part

7m21s Good job playing off the crowd

7m41s Great callback, I gotta remember to always use it

Overall: Solid set, especially given the small audience size. The only bit that needs work is the second half of the Netflix joke, and it’s a delivery issue: I need to let the audience know I’m not serious.

A mic with five or six comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HuEQOKwYHV0

1m35s Say “twice neglect” happier

2m43s Don’t pause after “bullshit”

3m20s Pause for half a beat after “education” and again after “love”

3m49s Say “glutes” instead of hamstrings

Overall: Working out new jokes and rewrites, there’s potential but they need work

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YYDoxOmGVwQ

1m41s Rephrase “you don’t wanna know what I’ll do”

2m07s Put the emphasis on the word “AND”

2m30s Weird pause around “ladies” that should be the start of the next sentence, not the end of the sentence

4m40s Pause after “I’m not a sociology expert”

5m19s Don’t acknowledge it’s messed up

5m50s Change this punch line, there’s a lot of potential for this joke

6m22s Maybe I should say “open source for open relationships”

Overall: Working out new stuff at a mic. The “we’re not friends” joke has potential

The music and comedy mic, I’m there earlier than usual

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GQcdDrNrWiY

0m46s Don’t acknowledge the riffs are bombing that quickly

2m22s Say “and” before “I can’t play tennis drunk” or it seems disconnected

2m34s Do the mom impression better

2m42s Kill the medical jargon line

3m35s Put more emphasis on the disgust on “buy my love”

5m25s More emphasis on “important”

5m37s Cut the slogans

7m38s Shouldn’t have forced that tag back into the joke after it got derailed

Overall: Working out newer jokes is rarely pretty, but always necessary.

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tWtuB9INhKM

0m52s The “Shmuck” should follow “syndrome” without a pause

2m09s Don’t stutter

2m41s Remember the jokes

3m02s Sell the disgust of buying my love more

3m47s Cut the slogans

3m55s Try “disapproving mom hero”

5m06s Try “no actual monkeys will be hurt, they’ll be killed”

Overall: Trying out newer material, it needs work.