Category: Comedy

Two hours into a bar show for four or five people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wV-gKnS3J8w

3m45s Always nice to get an applause break from three people, but it’s even better to do shows with more than three people

4m45s I messed up the wording, it should be “you’re much better off getting me the food network video game… soufflé hero”

5m27s Try smiling throughout this joke

7m09s Try switching hands for the microphone before doing “perfect”

7m25s More emphasis on “never”

Overall: Decent. I got them to pay attention two hours in and worked out some newer stuff in the middle.

The 8pm Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mj-G0VJEihU

3m24s Good job addressing the situation

5m26s Don’t stumble on the punch line

5m29s Pause for an extra second before “neuro war profiteering”

5m59s Stepped on a laugh

Overall: My A material got big laughs and I mumbled a closing punch line on one newer joke and then the voting joke delivery isn’t right yet.

MCing the 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QWxA2iyluvE

0m20s I should also add “you’re very astute sir”

1m25s The hand motion seemed a bit robotic

2m10s Sell the surprise of being correct more

2m18s Add in a “too late”

4m13s Go into more “psychic” stuff here instead of another bit

4m57s Better late than never

5m18s Do a little more crowd work there, I only did like 20 seconds

6m52s Take a pause before the adorable line

7m48s Good job ending the up front time on a good laugh

Part 2 – Check spot

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=43RFLzwb4JY

3m18s Good job playing on her line

4m20s Shouldn’t have done this part of the joke here

5m06s Improvise playing with hair better

6m22s Good job making them clap a second time

Overall: Decent job MCing, the crowd work could be better and I should go into crowd after every minute long joke instead of after every two jokes, but otherwise it was good.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FwT3NDB0uRU

0m26s The way to make that a joke and not a rant is: “You go around thinking, I could upgrade, I should upgrade, I’m single…”

0m57s Say “and” before “bullets”

1m15s Try “walk out” instead of “leave”

1m25s Say “tricep” instead of “wrist”

2m39s Pause after “oh cmon”

3m35s Say “it’s called”

5m14s Be more incredulous in the delivery

Overall: Working out some jokes, the yoga words need changing and I need to improve my delivery on the other newer jokes.

A lounge show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5F6sOh2MWmw

0m18s That’s a good improvised opening bit

0m40s It’s loud where the camera is because there’s a bar back there

2m28s After those extra laughs from not me talking, address that “now the audience is heckling each other” or something

3m50s I think it was the same guy who pointed at the other guy before, I could’ve had a nice call back

Overall: Solid. I even got everyone at the bar quiet and paying attention after the first three or four minutes. Again, I left some messing around with the crowd on the table, as there were a few moments I could’ve gotten a couple more laughs by keeping an interaction going.