An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6XtStFYVVog
0m57s Deliver this while smiling, not while angry
1m44s Try saying “that basically means” instead of just “basically”
2m43s Act out the waitress putting the plate down and saying it
3m03s Finish more of the marriage sentence before interrupting myself
4m20s Try that as an actual line
Overall: Working stuff out at a mic, I might’ve improvised a good line about not knowing the word for non dysfunctional family
Opening for a sketch comedy show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AiTKjqkAM2A
2m07s Rephrase that better, “I’m glad only one person got that, for the rest of you that means four years of your life weren’t flushed down the toilet”
5m10s I improvised this part, but there’s something in there
5m30s Applause break after twenty awkward seconds, I’ll take it
6m16s Try “clinic” instead of “rally”
7m42s It seems like the jehovah’s model joke is weaker than my other two mom bits
8m09s Pause between “bought them all” and calling out the fork
8m39s Add a bring it
8m42s Try “Sir, have you been telling jokes tonight” and improvise about that more
9m00s Don’t use the word “whore house”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vmM4FmGQdMo
1m52s I bailed out on the last part of this joke, and that’s the part I wanted to test
Overall: Really good set with two legit applause breaks. I should’ve finished the newer joke towards the end and called out the fork dropping better as it messed up the timing of one of the jokes.
Going up 2.5+ hours into a show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uf06mbq4pRw
3m39s Maybe I shouldn’t dead pan the delivery on that line
4m34s Rephrase to “talk higher”
Overall: Decent considering how long the audience had been there. The voting joke is getting better but still not fully there.
The writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wEQD6cbulxg
1m47s Instead of “I mean.. what a bargain” try “I know.. what a bargain”
2m02s Stop myself in the middle of the word “jersey”
2m18s Cut the celebrity part of the joke
2m54s Get to the impression quicker
Overall: Working out jokes. The new poster joke has potential.
Going first on the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=f2sxfb9M94g
1m35s I could’ve asked her if she was a philosophy major too
3m22s I should’ve given the plane punch line an extra second for a laugh
7m55s Decent job playing off of the situation even though it didn’t get a big laugh
Overall: Mediocrity at its finest. I should’ve gone into some crowd work or something caue the jokes were barely hitting.
