An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-x9oEP66eaM
0m24s Cut the poly sci majors line
3m12s I think it should be “file those deductions” not “those dependents”
Overall: Pretty mediocre. Working out some newer stuff and rewrites.
Performance Critique: December 8b
Dec 8b
MCing a bar show with 6-8 audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=84CBzUmZKLs
2m39s Change “is paying for” to “bought”
3m27s Awkward jump from crowd work back into material, try repeating “Israel” like I’m thinking about it before doing the actual joke
6m28s Don’t actually go around the whole room
7m18s Go into the powerpoint joke I do
9m28s This joke needs a stronger ending
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V3oGlzRQBxM
Overall: Decent job MCing but I could be even more energetic.
Performance Critique: December 8a
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GHDqt0F7184
0m43s Add in “I sleep with women above 20”
1m52s Change “while” to “and”
3m37s Change “come on in” to “enjoy your trip”
3m55s Smile while doing this joke
Overall: Decent for a mic. I did three new jokes at the start, one of which, the “you don’t live too far” has decent potential.
Performance Critique: December 7
Closing out my Astoria show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PUqyMbQMsFU
0m22s Have the word “floor” in that sentence
1m12s Don’t lean back on a punch line
1m38s Ask a little more about the birthday instead of just acknowledging it without any follow up
2m31s Stay in character when getting the comics to quiet down, and go into it for more than a one liner
3m55s Reword so “Eddie Murphy” is last
5m52s Try adding “I’m not pandering to you people”
7m22s Say all of this in my head and just go into the next joke
8m27s Deliver all of the nobel prize stuff more naturally, it feels forced and acted
9m18s I should’ve said “right, birthday boy?”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LPFsWvxeeYQ
1m47s Throw in a “how do you think I felt?” before the survivor song
Overall: Lousy. I had a couple of big laughs but it was mostly weak. I should’ve done more crowd work since material wasn’t really working.
Performance Critique: December 5
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qev6Fm4HRjo
0m29s Use the word “above” not “over”
0m45s Cut the dorm wall studying lines
1m47s Reword the act out
2m02s Change “mother’s” to “mom’s”
3m03s It should be “pro Arab” not “pro Palestine”
4m18s Say the line without stuttering
Overall: Eh. I worked two brand new jokes at the start, they’ll have potential once I memorize them.
