Category: Comedy

Closing out my Astoria show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PUqyMbQMsFU

0m22s Have the word “floor” in that sentence

1m12s Don’t lean back on a punch line

1m38s Ask a little more about the birthday instead of just acknowledging it without any follow up

2m31s Stay in character when getting the comics to quiet down, and go into it for more than a one liner

3m55s Reword so “Eddie Murphy” is last

5m52s Try adding “I’m not pandering to you people”

7m22s Say all of this in my head and just go into the next joke

8m27s Deliver all of the nobel prize stuff more naturally, it feels forced and acted

9m18s I should’ve said “right, birthday boy?”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LPFsWvxeeYQ

1m47s Throw in a “how do you think I felt?” before the survivor song

Overall: Lousy. I had a couple of big laughs but it was mostly weak. I should’ve done more crowd work since material wasn’t really working.

Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qev6Fm4HRjo

0m29s Use the word “above” not “over”

0m45s Cut the dorm wall studying lines

1m47s Reword the act out

2m02s Change “mother’s” to “mom’s”

3m03s It should be “pro Arab” not “pro Palestine”

4m18s Say the line without stuttering

Overall: Eh. I worked two brand new jokes at the start, they’ll have potential once I memorize them.

Going second on the 8PM Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4WFWHZujIbw

3m35s No need for this part of the joke, especially after it gets a laugh

3m57s Never perform these last 22 seconds again

6m03s Smile a little more in the delivery

7m24s Add in “cause we killed your savior”

8m34s This is horribly worded, fix it

Overall: Solid set but there were a few awkward moments, I brought the crowd back every time it happened, but that ruined the momentum of the set. And three of my newer jokes are coming along, they just need a little more finessing.

Going last on the 8pm show with a light crowd

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BErz-p4VjU4

0m33s Get rid of “if you” so that it’s just “don’t ruin this for me”

3m35s Get rid of this part of the joke or change it up

5m44s Have a better response to that

6m44s That’s too forced don’t do that

6m51s I should use this line more often after I go too far

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rTcj5MvYowI

0m35s Call out the person applauding for being a dick

1m22s That’s one of the stronger responses “neuro marketing” has gotten so I added “neuro comedy” too

Overall: Mediocre set but I finished stronger than I started and worked in three newer jokes.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LyfajO1MI8I

2m43s Try doing the security questions before the bus

4m11s There’s better wording for this

5m35s Too bad this line won’t work anywhere else

6m34s Say “inflation”

Overall: Decent for a mic with eight comics. I did jokes that work to start and end the set and kept working out my new jokes in the middle.