An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SVrZ2ToCyko
4m42s Decent response to the interruption
5m45s Cut the whole “joys of cooking”
6m14s Good job getting the last laugh
6m32s End the sentence with “that explains it”
Overall: The most interesting thing was my dealing with a couple of heckles.
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cnsHYjmPK0w
2m48s Stopping my statement was funny cause he was a tough looking dude
3m41s This line is a keeper in the rewrite
4m21s Get rid of the whole castration topic
6m20s Pause slightly longer before “war profiteering”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6csxfTrevd8
0m49s More bass in my voice for “Tuesday”
Overall: Decent but not great.
A writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=e0zCBWJE-SE
0m09s Don’t comment on the MC messing up the intro, especially if it’s a mic. (Unless it’s really funny.)
3m21s Don’t repeat “stay loyal” twice
4m28s Shake the hips a little more
4m55s Cut the genetic line
Overall: Weak response even for a mic. The dogs joke needs more rewriting.
Going last at a music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=j_e30DwloR8
6m56s Don’t say “it’s not a real thing”
8m29s Change “know what I’m talking about” to “know what I mean” because I said the former ten seconds ago
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QRz5IdxUkgo
0m52s Change the lines after “my grandma”
1m49s Change “impatient” to “tired of waiting”
Overall: Good for six people being there. I got consistent (but light) laughs throughout.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nauqYa7bXl0
1m14s More emphasis on “that’s”
1m22s Stop treating “it’s really hard to raise a, dog” as a punchline
1m39s End sentence at “in a basement” no need for “for a couple of hours”
3m19s Better delivery on “that’s totally understandable”
3m31s It should be “comedian” not “cop”
4m57s End the joke on “grandma” or change the next twenty seconds
6m14s Try moving my whole arm and not bending at the elbow
Overall: Reworking some stuff, some of it needs work, a lot of it needs cutting.
