2 hours into a hostel show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0XQUypaNAoE
1m49s Deliver “not all the white ones are right” better
5m30s This instantly stopped sounding conversational
5m42s Get rid of the “clap if”
Part 2
httpv://ww.youtube.com/watch?v=wfxGJ5_Vg4w
0m27s Do air quotes for the word “passion”
1m38s Better response, “the only way to get back at him is for you to pick up at the show too”
Overall: Average at best. The New Years joke needs lots of work.
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://ww.youtube.com/watch?v=93QsiPY3fGQ
1m46s Do a much bigger smile before hitting that line
2m25s It’s not conversational to just go right into another joke, add an “oh man” or “I like you guys” or something
3m35s Cut the “clap if” part
4m10s Cut everything between “clap if” and here as well
Overall: Weak even for a mic. The first and last line of the New Years joke is good, the minute in the middle needs serious work.
A 10pm bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uNkagbPuQg0
0m14s Don’t go into material until the room is a little quieter
3m15s Add in “even when they’re mumbled”
4m22s Good job calling out the situation in the room
5m48s Cut the “clap only if” part
Overall: Mediocre. I didn’t get the room under control before doing material and I paid for that by having people keep zoning in and out during my set. The take away is, don’t start doing material until the room is (nearly) silent.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D4tYQczwaws
3m11s Nice improvised line, keep an eye out for someone in glasses for future sets
3m21s Learn to pause after “PhD program”
6m18s Slightly weird transition, give another half second pause
6m48s Don’t start licking my lips until the “hair lip” laugh ends, so I get an extra laugh on the lip licking
Overall: Great set but the New Years joke needs tightening up.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qU9Wj4fj9Q4
4m32s That was improvised in the moment but should become part of the joke
4m53s Just hit “neuro couch” harder
6m14s Keep turning my head further like I did for the first answer
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tsfsm1u4Myk
1m19s I should bail out of this joke when it gets interrupted
1m46s That last tag doesn’t work, or needs a different delivery
Overall: The set was very up and down. There were some big laughs and some lulls. It needs to be more consistent.
