A show for 10-12 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E9tM4WHPplI
0m11s The guy before me used an overhead projector so I opened with this joke
4m22s It should be “you gave me a look like” instead of “you were like”
5m01s Pause before “I brought the pliers”
7m22s Good adjustment
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=murY_BcC06I
3m45s Have a normal face for a half second longer before scrunching it up
Overall: I had light yet consistent laughs throughout the set.
The writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cVv5V55KFtY
1m00s Get the sentence clearer
2m28s The child services stuff is lame, rewrite it
Overall: Weak even for a mic. Rewrite the dogs joke again.
A show at the back of a bar for 8 people while the Jets are making their game winning drive in the wild card round of the playoffs
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NamLeBE5-Ak
2m52s Address the Jets winning for an extra five seconds until the celebrating settles down a little more
3m56s I had fun doing that
5m58s It should be “I talk about this” not “we talk about this”
Overall: I didn’t do great but I had fun considering the situation was stacked against comedy.
MCing the 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gew4vwQcAV8
1m39s I can add “that’s my only real psychic power, detecting bullshit”
3m21s Decent improv
5m27s Should’ve addressed this talking earlier
6m45s Good callback
Part 2 (doing time between comics)
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZxJ_63gt41c
4m22s Don’t stutter the line
5m01s Decent response
Overall: I didn’t get huge laughs on my material but the comics all did well so I did my job as the host. I did get some good laughs on some of the improvised lines so I should work towards doing more improvising when hosting.
The 8pm show with a crowd of about 20
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yd8sOqkvNlw
0m39s Don’t say “like” before “little girl”
1m03s Take a slight pause before saying “we’re not friends”
2m01s Smile a little more during these lines
4m23s This is the funniest line of the dog joke, rewrite this joke around this line
5m50s Try to rephrase to, “I just learned who not to kiss”
7m08s Cut the word “extra”
Overall: There were consistent (but not huge) laughs throughout, except during the dogs joke, which needs a rewrite.
