A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VVkvRwqWwZw
1m02s Don’t say “like”
1m16s Add in “everyone knows”
2m08s Cut the striking resembelance line
4m40s Say the line a little angrier
Overall: I bombed, my materials didn’t work nor did my save lines.
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y7TqHIzZq6A
0m19s Stare out into the audience while moving the mic stand
1m37s Change to “she also complained”
2m49s Say the line harder
3m08s Say “I’m an organ donor. Just yesterday I donated…”
3m38s Rephrase to “You’d be surprised how often Jesus would use…”
4m01s Rephrase to “The only place I kill at is…”
4m48s Say the cat line towards the start of the bit
Overall: A lot of the newer jokes are almost there, they just need some rephrasing
The 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xalpIikHYS4
1m32s Interesting that it’s a slow laugh that keeps going
2m42s Nice
4m39s She said “Wait a minute, I can’t breathe” and I broke character for a second. Don’t break character
11m33s I should do the crazy laugh when that line doesn’t get a laugh
Overall: This was the strongest the dark persona has done. I was getting laughs before I even started talking.
Friday 8pm show for 15-20 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IVH-WD_kngI
1m17s I could’ve held off on the door money line for a few minutes
1m34s Say “everyone knows” first
6m00s Great time for that line
6m23s More emphasis on “that”
7m11s No need for the surround sound line
Overall: Decent set.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RWN0RAMF_lY
1m35s Try “she also complained” instead
4m30s Pause for an extra two seconds before puppies, so it’s more random
5m38s Rewrite or cut the survivor joke
Overall: Standard open mic.
