Doing a spot at my Astoria show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wV09qoWDnsc
2m29s Say “fall in” not “be in”
4m57s Rephrase to “The only place I kill at is the comedy club”
5m35s Say it angrier
8m28s Say that earlier in the set
Overall: Not a great set but I stayed in character and even did a bit of crowd work.
Doing late night 2.5+ hours into the show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iqNh6-ptSfU
1m15s Voice changed, that shouldn’t happen
1m33s Don’t break character
2m18s Don’t smile
2m31s Don’t laugh
2m49s Get rid of “karaoke”
Overall: It took two minutes, but then the audience really started to like the character. I need to not crack up while doing this persona, as it ruins it.
Another mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KxMwBRVG6ss
2m51s Get rid of the lines after “pliers”
4m15s A little too long in silence
4m40s Don’t break character
5m25s Add “until the lie detector”
6m19s Say it angrier
Overall: Working out a new persona, I need to learn to never break character.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S9apAJ4U9mk
0m27s No need for “pigtails”
1m04s Don’t break into a smile
1m52s Cut this tag
2m04s And this one
3m01s Unnecessary line, better to say “You can be next”
3m40s Too much info, leave it after “pliers”
5m15s Get rid of the whole choice thing
5m40s Say that angrier
6m24s Get rid of the word “but”
7m24s Get rid of “again”
Overall: Standard mic response. I’m working out new tags and a new persona.
Doing a check spot two plus hours into the show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RPZBV7jvG6I
1m22s This persona should never say the word “joke”
1m34s Rephrase to “I’m not sure why you’re laughing, that’s horrible” instead of telling them not to laugh
3m25s Good line
7mA02s I seem more angry than creepy
Overall: Rough even for a check spot
