A bar show for 6-8 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WXAb1kiAl10
1m45s Don’t say the uncomfortable line here
2m05s Get rid of “you have a striking resembelance”
3m33s Cut the cameras lines
5m27s Should’ve done the “stuff you in a wall” instead
Overall: Pretty weak set.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ogRC2-x1YMI
1m30s Cut the security cameras line
2m29s Try “that kills at the Apollo” instead
4m50s More emphasis on “that”
6m10s More emphasis on “that’d”
Overall: Standard mic response.
A 10pm show for 5 or 6 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H1WpxwwTIvk
0m40s Say “I’m not sure why you’re laughing” instead of “don’t laugh”
4m58s I improvised that line, and it’s going into the act
6m48s This part feels forced. I need to find a different way to do this material.
8m21s Say that line angrier
9m06s Make these last few sentences clearer
Overall: Really good first six minutes. I need to figure out a better way to work in the Russian mom material while doing the new persona.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k5F79yRv8Zg
1m39s Change “you have a striking resembelance” back to “she also complained”
3m34s Change to “we need OUR privacy”
5m11s No need for the window line
5m30s Weak joke
6m59s Change the hand that’s holding the mic after that line
Overall: Standard weak open mic response.
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VVkvRwqWwZw
1m02s Don’t say “like”
1m16s Add in “everyone knows”
2m08s Cut the striking resembelance line
4m40s Say the line a little angrier
Overall: I bombed, my materials didn’t work nor did my save lines.
