A check spot on the 9pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7bKBZ925u_g
0m55s It should be “about my kid” not “for my kid”
2m12s Address it better, like I have in previous sets
2m31s Change “comedian” to “comic”
5m15s I can tighten that premise into a lot less words
Overall: Decent response for a check spot.
Doing a set on the 8pm show for 10 people, 5 of whom happened to catch my open mic set before
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wN8IoOyZUB8
1m47s Be drunker during the act out
3m18s Do the sound at the same time as the gun motion
7m28s It’s polysci knowledge not history knowledge
Overall: Mediocre in general, good compared to everyone’s set before me on this show.
A writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=c5to_wojwbk
1m18s Cut the promoting line
1m48s The new crazy voice
3m05s Good job being in the moment
4m15s Don’t say the uncomfortable line after a big laugh
4m33s The follow home line should be in a crazy voice
Overall: Good for a mic
Doing a check spot on the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YnV0TDQ8l2Q
1m48s Cut the we’re not promoting lines
1m56s Say it in the girl’s voice
2m05s Good quick save after a few lines missed
4m12s Cut “focus on” from the sentence
6m31s I shouldn’t do this joke if I haven’t done the mom act outs to setup the neglect
Overall: Good for a check spot, lost them for 30 of the last 40 seconds cause I went to material that wasn’t justified yet.
Doing a check spot on the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lTemYGZVTxk
1m12s Say “then I asked” instead of “then I was like”
1m30s Reword to “I wish adults were as honest as kids”
2m34s Acknowledging it’s a clever not funny joke seems to work
3m31s Change “become” to “be”
4m32s Good job dealing with the “ooh” I could’ve gotten to it sooner though
Overall: Very good for a check spot
