Category: Comedy

The 10pm show with five people or so

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ewF2bq5dR4U

0m11s Someone else got that intro

0m33s Add “and stripping is less demeaning”

1m22s If I’m gonna acknowledge that I’m going into real jokes, make a joke about it “and now structured things that I’m gonna try to make seem unstructured and natural”

3m30s Good job acknowledging it, even if it didn’t get a laugh

5m06s Good job milking crowd interactions

6m18s Pause after “hundreds of dollars a month to tell jokes”

7m12s That’s the right punch line, I might be able to tag it though

Overall: Good job talking to the crowd for most of the set and not just doing jokes

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vrZGxYOwz_Y

2m38s Cut or reword

3m23s Try “like I’ve wrapped piano wire…”

5m34s Reword to “I can prove it with letters from dozens of shrinks”

Overall: Decent for a mic.

Hosting a writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NUZw1LC9A1c

1m40s I’m trying to say all the psychotic things in my normal voice

1m51s And it doesn’t flow right

2m33s This delivery is a one time experiment that doesn’t work

3m43s Change “knew” to “understood”

3m56s Say “this is me positive” without “being” and with the same tonality as my mom

Overall: Eh. I’m playing with different vocal tonalities for the crazy character, and my regular voice isn’t the right tonality.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=85Zezux02aI

1m18s I went a little too aggressive for no reason

3m33s Address the guy getting offended at coke heads more, could’ve gotten extra laughs

5m14s Don’t say “I know” unless someone gasps or reacts audibly

5m42s The puppies lines is funnier without a save line before it

7m14s She said “for you” that’s awesome

7m22s Keep milking it and talk to her more

Overall: Average to mediocre. I need to learn to embrace crowd interactions instead of get annoyed by them.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_LBfXSbYW_4

0m11s Acknowledge the audience before starting, or stare at them until all the talking stops

0m45s Don’t stutter on store

2m08s Reword to “I probably shouldn’t have pointed at”

2m20s I’m not sure what he said, but I should’ve addressed it more

4m18s Go into the interruption more, even if it got a laugh

6m09s I should hit that line harder

8m27s Address it more and don’t talk over it

Overall: Mediocre set with a couple of big laughs in the middle. I should do a better job of addressing the talking.