A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9eOq-d7IX54
3m05s Connect this more explicitly with the disappointing parents idea
4m48s Deliver it like I’m more frustrated
6m55s First say “I’m not sure why I pointed at you”
7m43s Figure out a smoother way to explain and transition this part
Overall: Good set but I need a smoother transition towards the end.
A writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IsdrpI_rRFg
1m52s Funny response while in act out character
2m10s Change from pointing motion to something else
2m42s Transition is very jarring, figure out a different way to introduce it
5m40s Rephrase to “what’s wrong? Is my lipstick smeared?” and then wipe my mouth
5m56s The “twelve minutes” should be at the start of the sentence
Overall: First joke went well the rest was mediocre.
Doing a prom show at 2am
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rgO1p0rkEN4
0m23s Should’ve said “if you have to say you’re cool, you’re not cool”
1m41s Say at as a statement, not a question
1m58s I need a setup before doing the act out
2m14s Say “community college” instead of “Yale”
3m17s Point at the kid for this line
4m37s Don’t hold the mic with two hands like this, it’s weak body language
6m16s Good improvised line
10m48s At least I ended on an ok laugh
Overall: I sucked. I don’t seem as confident as usual and my energy level is too low for teens at 2am.
Doing a check spot
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ve_vLrcjxvY
0m52s Don’t hold the mic for this
1m48s Put a hand on the hip for the act out
3m23s Do a better drunk impression
7m24s Good call back to previous improvisation, even if the audience didn’t follow it
9m32s Let the “ooo” finish before addressing it
Overall: Respectable for a check spot.
A bar show for about 8 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VesRi8TKwSI
1m20s Rephrase sentence to “I have a friend Blade, who also wants to do stand up but he can’t because…”
3m40s Point with one hand, not two
4m38s Don’t introduce him again, just go into his physicality
6m23s I could’ve made the transition a little smoother with “my favorite website is also related to movies”
7m06s That’s the wrong laugh for that character
7m43s Find a better way to get this across
Overall: Ok for a small show. I need to find a better way to phrase some things.
