A writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YwTUUC8H6VI
0m47s Cut that line altogether
2m08s Think of a different punchline
2m32s Don’t do the wet joke the first time that Blade comes out
3m59s Don’t hesitate mid sentence
Overall: The new mom bits did ok, everything else was weak
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6lIvqT65IaA
0m35s Say “he’s like” before “you’re making good points”
4m24s First time that’s gotten an applause break, good sign
5m25s Good save
6m34s Don’t do the secret thing until I get to the third time of being in the character
Overall: Eh, I had consistent small laughs throughout. I remember it going better in person.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xpLNWBcx_Cg
1m56s The wording isn’t even close to right
2m27s Go with a more unexpected line than nurse outfit
3m19s Rephrase start to “If you want to make an omelet…”
4m29s Keep looking for the right punch line
Overall: Weak mic response.
Another open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7MT7YeQTPmw
0m25s It should be casting call not casting audition
2m38s Cut a few words out
3m08s Hit the “no” harder
5m50s I mixed up the congress and Hillary lines
6m04s Cut this whole setup
Overall: Weak response, working out newer stuff.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xfsy2C9Jf6c
3m03s Get the saying right on this, it’s spare, then spoil
3m57s Punchline doesn’t make sense, rework
4m07s Do this one before the chicken one
6m01s Cut this whole premise
Overall: Eh, working out some newer stuff.
