The 8PM Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lCdH_po2wOY
0m21s Better to ask “really, that’s an O?” instead of telling them
1m03s Rephrase to “that means four years of your life weren’t flushed down the toilet”
2m42s Put more emphasis on “freezing”
3m28s I should’ve added one more comment
4m45s Get rid of “your”
Overall: Good but not great set, the Netflix joke went really well to close.
A 6PM Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rH82Tc–p7Q
0m58s Put the emphasis on “your” and try putting “flush” towards the end of the sentence
Overall: A very average, very short set.
The 8PM Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oLOAD1ikoa4
0m35s Kill “it’s a lousy discus”
0m58s Make the bottle blowing sound a few more times
1m37s Wait for the laughs to stop before pointing the gun
3m22s Smile as I do the poses
4m00s I love these groans
4m48s Nice improvised line
Overall: Great set with multiple applause breaks. If a punch line didn’t land in a set like this, I’m way more likely to cut it
A 6:30 Show for 8 or 10 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Du9cD0ReDVQ
0m49s Do the sound for longer, or better yet don’t do this part of the joke
3m04s Add the word “either” after “my mom doesn’t like that joke”
3m30s I forgot the second half of the line, it should be “I told my mom I’d do modeling and commercials”
4m00s Keep moving my hips the whole time for this character
Overall: Weak. I should’ve went back to flirting with the girls once material wasn’t getting me anywhere.
A mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iN30dXEkf-U
0m34s Change “sex partner” to “lay”
1m12s Cut this tag
1m59s Face the same person who I said “I like your shoes” for the start of the joke
3m30s Change “masters” to “college”
5m09s Make a joke about it after saying “I wasn’t gonna be a dick and make a joke about it”
Overall: Nothing special, working out rewritten jokes
