Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bPKkEfGx7Pc
1m34s Get rid of the earthworm thing
2m12s Make that an actual sentence
3m22s It should be the same form of “exploiting” twice in a row
3m33s Get rid of the boomshakalaka
Overall: These newer jokes need some rework but have potential.
The 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FZtoSufsn_U
1m24s iPhone joke is finally hitting hard
5m54s Weird that this first one got an “ooooo”
6m58s This might be better than a regular chef
8m18s Lost them on the second half of Netflix
Overall: The first five and half minutes were great, then I did the newer and edgier jokes which didn’t hit as hard. I need to learn how to better handle and acknowledge the “ooos”
The 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ku4cOQvQjGA
2m39s Drag out “freezing” for longer
4m06s Go into the difference between “stories” and “jokes” for a little
4m38s Pause for the “oooo” to stop before getting to the next one, or else it feels like I’m trying to barrel through it
4m55s It should be “turn it down a notch” not “go back a notch”
5m39s Great job calling out the situation
5m48s Go into him apologizing more
6m46s That joke needs a stronger ending
7m08s Hold that last pose for longer
7m42s I’m going too fast
8m05s Good job ending on a big laugh
Overall: Good but I had three jokes that got “oooos” and I didn’t fully respond to it. Since a lot of my jokes walk the line, I need to figure out a way to always be ready for the Oooo / groan….
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cVglj7XvyBU
0m33s I could’ve added, “no, unemployed and interviewing?”
1m17s Try, “she’d probably come back with a shareholders report”
4m11s Get rid of “I got it from Ikea”
5m50s I need to make it clearer that I’m combining cell phone plans and child adoptions
Overall: I did newer jokes and they’re getting there but need some rewriting
Late night music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EcllEZBItIQ
1m38s Go into him trying this more, and make more jokes on it
2m59s Go back a line in the joke so everyone is still with me
3m24s Make the bottom of the bar graph clearer
3m59s Get rid of “I got it at Ikea”
4m57s Weird that this is the response it’s getting, I need to change these lines cause this isn’t a joke intended to get an “oooo”
5m35s It might funnier if I don’t say “I like your shoes” before doing the joke
8m10s Say “Cats” again before saying “the musical”
9m00s Instead of “horrified” say “upset”
9m14s Longer pause after “never forget”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EhbgUnCrGlU
0m33s Say “hazard lights”
Overall: Working out newer jokes, the second part of the millionaire joke needs a lot of rework and the ID thing needs some work but has potential.
