Category: Performance Critiques

MCing a midnight show in the basement of a bar

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PIX027g0KhY

0m38s I should say “Florida isn’t much better than Detroit”

1m08s Say “Hi ladies” before the disappoint twice line

4m07s Address the girls yelling in the background

4m15s Good job shifting back to crowd work after a joke didn’t go great

6m05s Mixed up the “you” and “her” terms, but it still worked

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6v6uVZjpwgM

0m07s I could’ve played that Cliff doesn’t start with a “K”

3m01s Comment on the words getting stuck that just happened

3m31s Instead of “I did this” say “I talked about this”

Overall: Good job mixing in crowd work with material while hosting, but I could’ve done more crowd work towards the end. The last five minutes I only did material and I should try to engaged the audience more.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4cKTLbP25F8

0m22s Call out the “woo” more, like “why are you proud of that?” or something

1m35s Good job on dealing with the disruption

4m08s Nice improvised line

5m29s Don’t do a third mom joke when the first two barely got laughs

Overall: Bad set. I got interrupted once and addressed it well but then I continued with my mother material when it was clearly not working, I should’ve tried switching topics earlier

A Friday 6:30 show for ten or fifteen people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aCFfl0BnTbc

2m49s Weird that the plane line completely missed when everything else is hitting

4m47s I improvised “cash only”, I should keep it

6m36s Call out the girl that wooed on it

7m11s Extra explanation of DVR didn’t lead to extra laughs

8m59s Turn to the side for “second door on your right”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=E4njCXzQ_ms

1m17s Learn to save my closer for the last joke instead of doing it earlier, otherwise I won’t end as strong as I can

Overall: Solid eleven minute set, the DVR relationship joke needs work and the neuro joke still needs some tweeking

A Friday open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=BzAu-R4E3aU

1m22s I need something else in there instead of “nice rack”

1m44s Say “girls I hook up with” not just “girls” it’s not clear enough

2m10s Do something instead of broccoli

3m22s Waaaay to wordy, although maybe it’s so wordy that it’s funny

Overall: Average response for an open mic. The millionaire joke needs a better line towards the end.

Late night music mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tuQjwn4Zx8c

1m33s I could do the shaking head comment of “you’re shaking your head like, there’s no way you’ll last that long”

2m38s Do the bar chart motion more than once

2m45s Nicely improvised save line that I can reuse

2m57s Don’t single out one person for “you’re a dick” make it the whole crowd

3m36s I need stronger “neuro” examples

4m05s Great call back line, worked the first time I did it

4m48s The end of the joke should be at “neuro war profiteering”

5m27s Wording should be “I just bought them all”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OJW09xET0uc

0m36s I improvised that line, and it’s a keeper

1m14s I need a different line instead of the rack

3m07s Make like I’m driving a car or something

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oI6JIWEkeCA

0m01s They brought me up a second time after the rest of the performers went up

0m30s I’m stalling til at least one person is listening

9m17s Good save to turn an “ooo” into a laugh

Part 4

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=auSX4XFxa1A

4m05s I tried writing on stage, it didn’t work but it was fun

Overall: The first time I went up on stage went well enough but the second time at the end of the show (Part 3 and Part 4) it was hard to bring people’s attention back.