Category: Performance Critiques

Doing a set at my Queens show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=edvQpKoJAoY

1m19s Since Halo isn’t crucial to the joke, pick something else that everyone has waited online for

2m16s Make this sentence clearer

3m35s Change the spreadsheet and winning formula lines

8m42s What I just said should’ve gone after “businessman” ten seconds later

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jlt1DxBtVC4

0m25s Only do “and nobody believes me” twice, not three times

2m05s After “pause” say “Ben” before saying “I didn’t get you anything”

3m19s Change “you’re not funny” to “I don’t appreciate your jokes”

Overall: Eh, slightly below average but the crowd work up front was good.

Late night, two plus hours into a show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4Y1jkWsZXDk

2m22s It took them an extra second to get it, good job waiting for it

3m52s Acknowledge the “cmon”

3m57s I need a better way to go into this joke

4m51s Face the audience during the act out

5m21s Use different hands for me and Sandeep

Overall: Great set, especially considering how much comedy the crowd had heard by that point. Of course, there’s still some adjustments to be made.

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hqtt08jXmjQ

2m14s Change notch and the winning formula lines

2m48s Change neuro-habitate to something else

3m05s Try “cause I used to sell THEM fake…”

5m25s This joke still isn’t working

7m09s I can try going straight to, “No Nick, since I unfriended you, I don’t have to pay rent, cause you’re not Facebook official” or something like that

8m47s Say “talked about” instead of “did this”

Overall: Decent for a mic but I need to figure out the mobile adoption center joke.

Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rDQe52Fay3A

1m30s I need to figure out a way to make this joke funny, I think the setup is off

2m33s Change neurocomic to something else

Overall: The mobile adoption center still needs to hit and my neuro examples could use some work

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7cihw37JcRs

3m22s The pinky and eyebrow raise is funny

6m21s The fundraiser line is a good improvised line

6m31s The start to this joke is weird

8m28s If they laugh really hard, I don’t need to do the motion

9m29s The iPhone app part of this joke needs to be rewritten or killed

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HhmbrSiiwks

1m15s The DVR joke needs to be funnier

1m27s Say “it’s the Netflix plan” not just “Netflix plan”

Overall: Very solid set. The the iPhone part of the Yelp joke needs fixing as does the DVR joke, but everything else is solid.