A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z6CaO-2di2E
3m37s I should’ve gone away from mom jokes after the first one didn’t hit that well
6m16s Try talking to them instead of doing more jokes at this point
7m17s Say “sell them”
Overall: I need to learn to get out of a string of jokes if the first one doesn’t hit in that subject area, especially during a shorter set. I also need to go into crowd work quicker when jokes aren’t hitting.
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EsXcsOBnRPQ
0m30s Get rid of “hundred dollar” before ipod
1m16s That’s not a good third example
1m59s Kill or rewrite this joke
Overall: Eh. The voting booth joke is getting better, and the wake up time mood needs a lot of work.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=90JmfnP6OLs
0m27s I need another retort before going into material
1m33s An applause break but I’m clearly annoyed
1m55s Add in “looks like a lot of people have quit their jobs”
2m15s Say “maybe” harsher
3m36s I stepped on a laugh, but people were talking so I didn’t want to lose control
4m24s Do the motions slower and milk it more
5m20s Acknowledge him saying “that is fucked up” before hitting the punch line, or don’t stop the first time and then address it later
8m00s I’m not usually condescending but I was thoroughly annoyed by the talking at this point
Overall: I had a strong set but I didn’t much fun because of all the talking and disruptions.
A 6pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=55l9V5mNg78
1m13s I’m talking way too fast
2m22s I should talk and observe the crowd at the beginning of my sets, that seems to get a good response
3m35s Slow down
4m02s Acknowledge a girl getting excited about my hookup schedule and say I can pencil her in
5m58s Make a couple more jokes at the gasp, or interact with her
6m27s Add in “but I’m gonna do it anyway”
Overall: Mediocre but decent ending. I should’ve tried talking to them a little more.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=z6PgcAs5QQE
3m57s I should’ve just stuck with the messed up wording instead of rephrasing
6m31s This setup feels forced and robotic, I need to make it more conversational
8m29s Hit that “open source” punch line harder
9m04s Find something funnier than “neuro athlete”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=reZmpKXKlNg
Overall: Kinda mediocre, I got laughs throughout, but not a lot of huge laughs. The biggest laughs were improvised lines, and I look like I could be having more fun.
