Category: Performance Critiques

Doing a 45 minute feature set for mostly musicians

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bROutMkKkcw

1m45s I didn’t need to address the crossed arms there, cause I had just gotten a good laugh

3m44s Good job addressing the situation, I could’ve gotten a couple extra laughs on “If you guys could just keeping smiling and not laughing the whole time, it would mean the world to me” or something

4m26s Instead of “What? You guys have morality” make it a statement as “I learned you have a morality”

4m42s Milk the poses for longer

6m37s Pause for longer between the first and second position

8m36s Don’t do this joke so early on, as it’s one of my weaker jokes and I need to build more momentum first

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=niuvSjKQoXw

0m52s Don’t say “here we go” twice, find different words before “sand”

1m12s Get more laughs before this

1m30s Deliver this with more confidence

2m39s Do one more round of “pow pow”

2m56s Pause for laughs

5m15s Kill the draft room line

5m47s I don’t need “to drive”

7m57s It should be “impress her friends with” instead of “brag to her friends about”

8m13s I should address the person doing the “whooos” instead of laughing

9m01s It should be “great COMEDY class”

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WaOMdkSasjE

0m25s I should’ve added, “Maybe I’ll try out those moves at the Greenwich festival”

0m42s Overly aggressive to the guy for no reason, I should get a laugh off of him instead of just getting mad

1m22s Only say “nobody believes me” until it gets a laugh, I should’ve done it once in this set

5m05s Sell the fist pump more, and address the “whooo”

5m19s Someone just walked in the room and I’m addressing it

6m26s More emphasis on “WHOLE”

6m55s Pause longer after “got your nose”

7m11s Ask more about how you meet at Yoga school

7m37s It should be “felt familiar” not “looked familiar”

8m55s Make a more natural dropping motion

Part 4

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GzMr_4nVeNU

0m10s Pause longer for it to actually get uncomfortable if I’m gonna acknowledge that

1m29s Good job mentioning the slogan again after it went off track a little

6m48s Don’t point to myself when saying “for her”

7m23s I should say “YOU’RE my netflix plan” instead of “it’s”

Part 5

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HJfOgGePvFA

2m59s Say “inefficient” more clearly

9m10s Sell the heart attack better

Part 6

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9GlEoAUW_L0

Overall: I did 49 minutes without notes, which is good. But I was overly concerned about remembering all my jokes that I didn’t do much crowd work and the places where I interacted with the crowd I seemed annoyed. If you want to hear 97% of my jokes, this is the post to watch.

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N22wuyIUAcg

1m16s I look miserable

1m45s Say “I’ve found” before “the three keys to…”

3m39s Think of a funnier third thing for the list

4m15s Keep my hands apart for longer

Overall: Eh, standard low response for an open mic. I need to learn to look like I’m having fun and enjoying myself at all times.

A show for 10-15 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_57SFk5UUJk

1m23s Good improvisation

1m39s Get a better poking motion

3m07s Reword to “They’re dicks, right?”

4m52s Keep the hands open for longer

5m28s I need something better than neuro athlete

6m29s Good job acknowledging and pushing it

Overall: Good set. My two newer jokes about shoes and being nerdy worked fairly well, although a couple of the lines need fixing. I did a good job acknowledging the “oohs” and moving past them.

Doing a set for five audience members at my Queens show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k7dq66u0gw4

0m26s The woman I’m talking to was at least 70

1m23s Good job attempting crowd work after a bit missed

2m59s I’m trying “airplane” instead of “plane” to give people more time to get it, I’m not sure that it’s helping

4m35s Maybe try adding “there were two people in front of me just taking their time”

5m13s Try not saying “or whatever”

6m32s Play with the audience member more, don’t go back into material that quickly

7m27s Do the “pow” more confidently

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TFWcKAr9ReM

1m00s Figure out a different and faster way to get from x games to ford focus

2m25s Move the hands multiple times

7m52s Say “slogan on the box”

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=550t6_s4qt4

0m22s More emphasis on “which usually means”

Overall: Weak set. I plowed through it and practiced material when I should’ve just worked on my crowd work.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wI6CQ71MerQ

0m48s Get rid of “hundred dollar”

1m11s I’m in stand up voice and not conversational voice

1m18s Smoke pot should be first in the list

3m01s Try “early inheritance”

5m22s That’s a new tag, I don’t know if I wanna keep it if it’s gonna get a groan as this joke is already on the line

Overall: The new jokes need work and the normal jokes didn’t hit that hard, that’s why it’s an open mic