Category: Performance Critiques

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YYDoxOmGVwQ

1m41s Rephrase “you don’t wanna know what I’ll do”

2m07s Put the emphasis on the word “AND”

2m30s Weird pause around “ladies” that should be the start of the next sentence, not the end of the sentence

4m40s Pause after “I’m not a sociology expert”

5m19s Don’t acknowledge it’s messed up

5m50s Change this punch line, there’s a lot of potential for this joke

6m22s Maybe I should say “open source for open relationships”

Overall: Working out new stuff at a mic. The “we’re not friends” joke has potential

The music and comedy mic, I’m there earlier than usual

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GQcdDrNrWiY

0m46s Don’t acknowledge the riffs are bombing that quickly

2m22s Say “and” before “I can’t play tennis drunk” or it seems disconnected

2m34s Do the mom impression better

2m42s Kill the medical jargon line

3m35s Put more emphasis on the disgust on “buy my love”

5m25s More emphasis on “important”

5m37s Cut the slogans

7m38s Shouldn’t have forced that tag back into the joke after it got derailed

Overall: Working out newer jokes is rarely pretty, but always necessary.

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tWtuB9INhKM

0m52s The “Shmuck” should follow “syndrome” without a pause

2m09s Don’t stutter

2m41s Remember the jokes

3m02s Sell the disgust of buying my love more

3m47s Cut the slogans

3m55s Try “disapproving mom hero”

5m06s Try “no actual monkeys will be hurt, they’ll be killed”

Overall: Trying out newer material, it needs work.

A music/comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pq5MgGPIGTA

1m10s Do the republican line before the favorite joke line

2m53s That’s a good improvised line

3m07s After “sad puppy eyes” I should go “this is where I capitalize on her lowered self esteem”

4m02s Cut the medical jargon line

4m53s Go back to a little crowd work or acknowledge I lost them at this point

6m25s Pause after asking that question

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7OEqv3MbcAI

Overall: I wasn’t doing great to begin with then I totally lost them after three minutes and never got them back.

A bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IYMGnPlFY-c

0m35s Good job acknowledging things

1m00s I forgot to bring up my hand like a gun

1m42s Add in “meet me in the bathroom”

2m08s Go back to saying “baggage check”

3m02s Don’t pause before “shmuck”

3m28s Smile more during this bit, don’t show the pain, haha

3m48s Pronounce “soufflé” properly

5m06s Good new tag

7m16s Start with marketing not neurogasm

8m29s After “you know the one” try saying “he’s like, I do now”

Overall: The A material worked better than the four or five new jokes I did in the middle, but they still got a decent amount of laughs and have potential.