Hosting the writers mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HA-H6yQ6I4g
1m17s Say “way more” instead of “more” and pause after each item I list
1m45s First have her name the position, then the kid name it something else
4m21s Say modern day not normal day
6m37s Be clearer and say “so the mom smiles at me”
Overall: Working out some jokes, the “we’re not friends” seems to have the most potential but I butchered the delivery and punch lines on some of the other ones.
Two hours into a bar show for four or five people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wV-gKnS3J8w
3m45s Always nice to get an applause break from three people, but it’s even better to do shows with more than three people
4m45s I messed up the wording, it should be “you’re much better off getting me the food network video game… soufflé hero”
5m27s Try smiling throughout this joke
7m09s Try switching hands for the microphone before doing “perfect”
7m25s More emphasis on “never”
Overall: Decent. I got them to pay attention two hours in and worked out some newer stuff in the middle.
The 8pm Show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mj-G0VJEihU
3m24s Good job addressing the situation
5m26s Don’t stumble on the punch line
5m29s Pause for an extra second before “neuro war profiteering”
5m59s Stepped on a laugh
Overall: My A material got big laughs and I mumbled a closing punch line on one newer joke and then the voting joke delivery isn’t right yet.
MCing the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QWxA2iyluvE
0m20s I should also add “you’re very astute sir”
1m25s The hand motion seemed a bit robotic
2m10s Sell the surprise of being correct more
2m18s Add in a “too late”
4m13s Go into more “psychic” stuff here instead of another bit
4m57s Better late than never
5m18s Do a little more crowd work there, I only did like 20 seconds
6m52s Take a pause before the adorable line
7m48s Good job ending the up front time on a good laugh
Part 2 – Check spot
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=43RFLzwb4JY
3m18s Good job playing on her line
4m20s Shouldn’t have done this part of the joke here
5m06s Improvise playing with hair better
6m22s Good job making them clap a second time
Overall: Decent job MCing, the crowd work could be better and I should go into crowd after every minute long joke instead of after every two jokes, but otherwise it was good.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FwT3NDB0uRU
0m26s The way to make that a joke and not a rant is: “You go around thinking, I could upgrade, I should upgrade, I’m single…”
0m57s Say “and” before “bullets”
1m15s Try “walk out” instead of “leave”
1m25s Say “tricep” instead of “wrist”
2m39s Pause after “oh cmon”
3m35s Say “it’s called”
5m14s Be more incredulous in the delivery
Overall: Working out some jokes, the yoga words need changing and I need to improve my delivery on the other newer jokes.
