Another mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KxMwBRVG6ss
2m51s Get rid of the lines after “pliers”
4m15s A little too long in silence
4m40s Don’t break character
5m25s Add “until the lie detector”
6m19s Say it angrier
Overall: Working out a new persona, I need to learn to never break character.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=S9apAJ4U9mk
0m27s No need for “pigtails”
1m04s Don’t break into a smile
1m52s Cut this tag
2m04s And this one
3m01s Unnecessary line, better to say “You can be next”
3m40s Too much info, leave it after “pliers”
5m15s Get rid of the whole choice thing
5m40s Say that angrier
6m24s Get rid of the word “but”
7m24s Get rid of “again”
Overall: Standard mic response. I’m working out new tags and a new persona.
Doing a check spot two plus hours into the show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RPZBV7jvG6I
1m22s This persona should never say the word “joke”
1m34s Rephrase to “I’m not sure why you’re laughing, that’s horrible” instead of telling them not to laugh
3m25s Good line
7mA02s I seem more angry than creepy
Overall: Rough even for a check spot
A Sunday night show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zY5LTKZlJrY
0m18s One of the “girls” was a guy with long hair, whoops
3m09s Cut “she’s quite the seamstress”
3m22s Say “it won’t be” in a more singing way
4m35s Cut the netflix callback
6m11s Cut the model part of the dog bit
Overall: I opened with dark material and didn’t lose the crowd. I need to hone and rewrite material for this persona.
MCing the 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H0Ly8c3ugWc
2m37s Decent job going from crowd work to my material
4m07s Add “so that means you’re married”
4m25s The worse my guesses, the funnier it is
9m47s Good job ending the time up front with a big laugh
10m02s Doing time between comics
12m54s Doing the check spot as the MC
14m33s Good improvised addition to the joke
Overall: I didn’t get huge laughs but I did a good job being positive and likeable, which is more important as the MC.
