Friday 8pm show for 15-20 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IVH-WD_kngI
1m17s I could’ve held off on the door money line for a few minutes
1m34s Say “everyone knows” first
6m00s Great time for that line
6m23s More emphasis on “that”
7m11s No need for the surround sound line
Overall: Decent set.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RWN0RAMF_lY
1m35s Try “she also complained” instead
4m30s Pause for an extra two seconds before puppies, so it’s more random
5m38s Rewrite or cut the survivor joke
Overall: Standard open mic.
A bar show for 12-15 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WgQCulVbhd4
2m33s Cut the “unwise” line
5m22s Good job waiting for the laugh
7m24s Good job handling the heckle in character
10m15s Try saying, “just making sure”
Overall: Good set. That persona helped make a loud bar fairly quiet.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U0Xq2BZe3lA
1m02s Be more prepared for random laughs with this persona
3m05s Change “unsafe” to “uncomfortable”
6m54s Good delivery on this line.
Overall: Decent for a mic.
Going last on a music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tzikk_-lZcQ
1m04s Don’t say the word “like”
3m23s This joke should be further apart from the Yale joke
4m26s Cut the unwise line
5m11s Rewrite or cut the woodchipper line
6m35s Reword to “you’d be surprised how often Jesus would…”
7m04s Reword to “the only place I kill at is…”
8m57s More emphasis on “that”
9m20s Good job handling heckling in character
11m30s Always nice to end on a strong laugh
Overall: Decent for a mic. Great job staying in character, especially with the crowdwork and heckles.
