Doing a check spot
httpv://youtu.be/LOoe_PnUrLw
2m46s Try pausing between “vicious cycle” and “of sadness”
3m34s Should try a save line by now
5m55s Not good when the save lines miss
Overall: Pretty bad even for a check spot. I should know to abandon the material and engage the crowd to increase the odds they start paying attention.
A show with 12 or so audience members
httpv://youtu.be/_vXckC4jki0
6m35s “Palestinian” statehood seems to be getting as little response as “two state solution” try another rewrite or cut it
7m13s It should be “black Friday” not “good Friday”
Overall: Weak set. Should’ve tried more crowd work.
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/umPVeVxKCCc
2m18s More emphasis on “hate”
3m43s Clearer that my dad’s talking
4m34s Dad saying it doesn’t fully make sense
7m19s Could’ve worded this smoother
7m31s Try pausing for half a second after “let’s”
Overall: Okay set but nothing great. The divorce joke needs a lot of rewriting.
Going up 2 hours into the 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/-AnhnODkkvc
6m46s Make it clearer that it’s my dad talking
9m34s Hand motion and pointing needs to be better defined
10m52s Try “five minutes of Russian optimism” before “where everyone’s dead”
12m07s Emphasis on “I”
Overall: First half was good then it dropped off and I never got them fully back.
MCing the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/jEwni_RE-co
1m58s Slight pause after “oh it’s okay”
5m58s Great interactive crowd work
15m20s Tighten this bit but at least there’s laughs now
Overall: Great job with the 11 minutes up front. I did a ton of crowd work and only did 3 or 4 jokes. The in between time was a little hit or miss.
