Month: February 2012

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/wHnG8qeRGc0

0m05s Say “thank you” directly into the mic after the applause dies down, instead of during

0m52s I need a better response for when they name a good school

2m19s Weird that “on the plane” got no laugh, try enunciating each word for delivery

6m11s Smile a little more while saying this

9m17s Find a stronger end to that joke

11m53s I could do a more colorful metaphor for “with all the enthusiasm”

12m15s Can cut out the relighting the candle part in a tight set

12m48s Good save at the end, but the end of the song should hit harder

Overall: Good set with consistent laughs but too many of the jokes ended weakly. Rework the endings or end each joke sooner.

A 10pm show with the camera 60 feet away picking up too much background noise

httpv://youtu.be/e8elZyWgyJw

0m42s More emphasis on “somebody”

3m51s Eyes need to be moving the whole time, don’t wait on the audience to laugh

5m45s Give her an extra half second to respond after “what are you up to later?”

7m52s The eyes should never stop moving

8m04s Scan the whole room, and maybe give a maniacal laugh, then get off stage, so that it’s more dramatic at the end

Overall: Mediocre. It was an up and down set that had some big laughs but way too many slow spots.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/VeaugxO2KbA

0m08s Say thank you an extra time to increase the odds the guy in the back stops talking, or take a longer pause

0m28s Having someone “shhh” for me is better

4m48s Good idea doing crowd work after that bit, smoother than going straight into material

6m12s Consider cutting or reworking this whole part

7m45s Good job waiting for the crowd

8m55s The cross country flight needs punching up, it’s weaker than the first two parts of this joke

12m07s Try “started charging eighty” instead of “upped my price to eighty”

12m53s Have the hand puppets kiss at the end

16m09s Make the waiter sound even sadder

17m20s I like the ending, would be good to do two one liners instead of one before doing the reveal

Overall: Decent set. Minutes 12-17 had too much sad stuff in a row and I didn’t make enough use of the safe word concept. I also could’ve addressed the talking a little more.

February 1

Going last at a music mic

httpv://youtu.be/_tpF3vWCVEM

4m15s Need to figure out if I should ask the question again if they answer it instead of saying “why”

4m55s Be a little more smiley/happy after the Blade character

5m50s Change “casket” back to “nursing home”

6m38s Seem more offended

7m35s Enunciate “upped” better

9m21s Air quotes should be on “super tough” not “movie watching”

10m28s The jump into the character is a good idea

10m46s Good job waiting for an extra second on the last line, might want to wait even longer or add “I’ll see you after the show”

Overall: Decent for last at a mic. The way I’m closing this set is definitely worth exploring.

An 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Syi-K380HFk

1m01s Could’ve repeated the set up again

4m24s I don’t need the carpenter tag if the ripsaw line gets a huge laugh

5m08s When one hand up, the other should go down

7m23s Figure out Blade’s walk better and walk around as him during the set a little so it doesn’t look as weird

Overall: Good set, jokes hit and I was able to do 3 Blade bits in under 8 minutes without creeping out the audience. This is also the first time I left on the “I have a secret” line and I liked the effect.