The writer’s mic
httpv://youtu.be/qai0xDdaIJw
2m44s Cut the Gandhi line
4m05s Basement line is good
4m38s Try to figure out a way to make this part of the bit
5m08s Tighten this line and make an actual punch line
Overall: Decent response for a mic. Keep working on that new immigrant wall street bit.
Going second on the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/0u47f4jtdy4
0m55s Hit this whole part harder and with more confidence
1m17s Anytime I need to acknowledge them not liking the suicide joke, I should bail out of it instead of doing another 2 minutes about it
2m27s Repeat “woodchippers and power drills” under my breath before the sponsorship line
3m50s it should be “we’ll shoot you” not “we’ll kill you”
6m48s Don’t stutter on the line
Overall: Weak set but at least the end was (relatively) stronger than the beginning
Quick spot towards the end of the 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/hKwlOfAmMBs
1m13s Cut the vote for president line
2m21s Might be fun to do a power drill sound effect
2m37s Cut the Gandhi tag
3m09s Don’t pause before “but like”
Overall: Weak short set.
MCing the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/UC-Tnq3O-z8
0m48s Guess three in a row and then go back and see about each one for accuracy
1m27s Dig more into what they do in TV
3m50s Try to give the Israeli security guy an accent
4m48s Cut the jdate part if they’re not laughing at the “smarter” jokes before that
5m24s Nice line
5m52s I can tag that with “that’s the look of, one of us needs to die already, and I don’t care which one”
7m12s Shouldn’t do the depression bit upfront when hosting
7m45s I could’ve called bullshit on that, although she had the whole name of it down
9m35s Hit “the bear” harder
Overall: Decent job MCing but could’ve been a little smoother and dug into the questions more
Going up at like 2am at a music and comedy mic
httpv://youtu.be/jIof44LcI28
2m55s Cut the disqualified for not being born here line and the Obama line
5m20s The addition of the gas and friend isn’t needed here
8m10s Should’ve done the eye line at the start of this bit
8m20s Cut the DMV line
8m48s The sentence should be flipped, half a face goes at the end of it
10m37s Say “kitchen” without “sink”
10m44s Last line should’ve been “I don’t know where the fourth head went either”
Overall: Ok for two in the morning.
