Towards the end of an 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/AromsSvtA50
1m30s Move eyes side to side slower
5m03s Instead of “this vicious cycle” say “MY vicious cycle”
5m20s Remember to the put mic stand back in to do a better hula hoop
6m42s Fifth and sixth year should be on the same hand
6m58s No need to point this out when I get a good laugh
8m28s Learn to pause after “sometimes” if a big laugh comes
8m38s Don’t stutter on the line
9m20s Nice improvised line
Overall: Good set.
The Sunday Writer’s Mic
httpv://youtu.be/OSyXjpyW7x4
3m04s Fix or reword the multiple carriers part
3m39s Don’t pause between kiss and on the mouth
3m50s Or just cut this whole part
Overall: Decent for a mic but the lines I’ve changed still need work
Going first on a 4:30pm show
httpv://youtu.be/pbtN1Ka47k4
0m28s Don’t say “good start”
1m28s Make “maybe” sound more threatening
2m04s Slow down the plane line
2m39s Call out the “ooh” as that line doesn’t deserve it
4m15s Should’ve done a save line before going into a new bit
Overall: Started out ok-ish then got weaker. Go to save lines sooner and don’t hold back from doing actual crowd work even if it’s a short set.
Going first on a 2pm show
httpv://youtu.be/4HrBXDi0dNk
4m21s Don’t switch hands on the mic for the two characters, it takes too long
5m26s Keep the mic distance the same
6m23s That’s the weakest the birthday song has closed in a while
Overall: Solid but not great, and the Birthday bit at the end wasn’t as strong as it usually is.
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/zoahUHZWILY
0m32s Instead of “what we’re doing” go with “what we’re working with”
4m02s Don’t stumble on the words
4m25s Don’t move my eyes so quickly
5m17s Don’t move my eyes so quickly on the side to side
6m10s It didn’t seem random enough, maybe say “hi” to her first
6m54s I forgot the end to this joke
7m02s Don’t switch hands on the circle
7m18s This bit goes better if I remember to put the mic in the stand for it
9m48s The mouth line needs rework
9m58s So does the new affectionate line
10m06s Good improvised call back
Overall: Good at the start and end but the anti marriage stuff didn’t hit as well as usual.
